|Reviews for Rule Number One|
| Sapphyre Nymph chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
mind adding another chapter? :)
| misery sister chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
You could probably get more reviews/feedback if you allowed anonymous reviews. :) Some people don't review because they don't have accounts on Fictionpress.
For a first timer in Fictionpress, this was great. I applaud you! And welcome!
| cerulean-azure chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Ahh.. love the cuddling part D
Good descriptions..I'm really curious what will happen the next day though XD
| Amizon chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Nice one shot, was very interesting and entertaining to read!
| Jade Q. Dean chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Fresh writing style! Iiked it
| TheRoaringHush chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
loved it :)
| bunnypopcorn chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
OMG I love this! It's excellent! :3
| Cynthia Dianne chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Okay okay... it was good, to start off my review. Uh, I don't like your word choice because it's distractingly redundant and you're using commas incorrectly. I had to take out some grammar books to fix that myself so don't feel too bad. Some people just read it aloud and you can hear where there should or shouldn't be commas... though they still miss a lot that way. Yeah, I don't really read much heterosexual stuff, I'm more into Boys Love, but it was pretty good. I enjoyed it and that's really what a writer should be going for, right? That or to make people think, though that tends to be in the later years... how can anyone under forty make someone think, right? Maybe even fifty, who knows. So I'm getting off topic. Keep writing well, fix that comma thing and maybe think about word choice more diligently... That is all. :D