Reviews for The Dangers Of WalMart
x Farii chapter 1 . 5/6/2010
I liike xD

Cute ;)
The Moments of Happiness chapter 1 . 2/4/2010
All together now!

"Awe! How adorable!"

*hem hem* Anyways.. this was a really cute story :)
PurpI3.14 chapter 1 . 1/27/2010

i loved this!

so innocent yet crazy

i like the ending _

and the idea of green beans

i agree btw

they are satans minions
shadowgirl618 chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
A couple things..

One, a few typos:

“So, where sitting together, right?” "So we're sitting together, right?"

And now I can't find the other one. It's in there somewhere. An "a" instead of an "I".

Otherwise, I love it. I wish it was extended. Consider it.

Adam kind of scares me, but I guess on a certain level that's a good thing. Haha. :)
bunnypopcorn chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
Wow, that was really good. Very well-written :DD.
CassandraStacy chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
This was a really cute story. What was the challenge you did? I liked Adam and how he just came up to her and started dancing . . . although I'd be freaked out if that happened, cute or not. The only thing I would change is that fact that I was still a bit confused about the family thing. Of course, that's hard to explain in a short story and I kind of read this pretty fast, so that may just be my fault. But overall very good. Hope you do well on your assignment!

blurrylights chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
I like it! The part about how he was related to who through her was just a tad confusing...(okay, a whole lot confusing). I also feel like the ending was a bit juvenile, and there were a few grammar mistakes. Missing commas, etc etc, and a few things didn't flow well.

My suggestion is sleep on it, and then look it over tomorrow. It always works.

Like I said though, i liked it overall. It was cuteness.

Good luck! :)
sandcastlesinthesand chapter 1 . 12/7/2009

Ember Black chapter 1 . 12/7/2009
Awwz I think this is adorable. I didn't even see any typos! Great job, I would give you an A _

as ever,

ember black