OMG... for a moment there I forgot that I was reading from a computer screen and thought I was at home curling up with a good book fighting the ravenous urges to continue reading...this was so good. it kept me at the edge of my seat and the imagery was hauntingly beautiful. I really hope to read some more of your stuff... I mostly write poetry but I hope you can find some time to read them and tell me what you think...

I think this is very interesting. Was this a dream of yours? I like it a lot. :)

I think that, if you wanted, you could turn it into a bigger story. That's only if you want to do so, though. I think it's good as it is. :D

~Shenhua