Reviews for The Statues Speak to Me
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 1 . 6/8/2012
Great story! I love how it's short yet sad... It's really pretty!

Keep up the great work! :)

Tarah xXx
JustPlainJane chapter 1 . 2/26/2010
I'm glad you won. You deserve it :)

This really made me think just how important a family is. Very, very well written. It was touching and beautiful (I hope you know what I mean) :)

Great job!
Artume chapter 1 . 2/18/2010
That's so sad. Very realistically written. Poor Paul! So he dies in the end? :( The hallucinations are the worst bit, they really demonstrate how lonely he is. Really well done! You deserved the win!
Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
Wonderfully written - I love the way he's kind of aware the statues aren't real, but still talks to them. And the comment of 'Why must my hallucinations be so insensitive?' gives a great, quick insight into his own character, I think just enough to make the reader feel for him.
Experiment101 chapter 1 . 1/14/2010
This, is amazing. I can connect in so many ways, to having a weird mental thing, to being homeless once... a few times, xd

the hardships of having no medical insurance. just hit the right spot for me.
Phantom Rottweiler chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
Saw your post on the Roadhouse Bar forum, first congrats on the win. Second, this was literally the saddest yet most beautiful works I've come across, it had me in tears at the end as I can very easily relate to what you're saying.

There is one thing that caught my curiosity though, and that was: "threatening to come again, and I will them to not." Are you saying it like 'willpower' to not?

I thoroughly believe everyone on this site should read this work and take even a few moments to ponder it.

Very excellent work. This is definetally a full Favorite.
Bertha chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
Nice! Let me tell you again how brave it was for you to put your life story out there for the world to read. I applaud you.
Morine chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
First of...CONGRATULATIONS (once again).

And second...this story was quite sad, but I liked it. I thought it was extremely well written. I like the fact that you made the three statues come to life. The story was a very different take on the holiday season. It was sad, but I loved it (as always)!

- Morine

P.S- SERIOUSLY, CONGRATULATIONS!
InkedSoul chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
Wow this is a nice story so far, suspenseful and well described.

I started giggling when the statues started singing but I turned a bit sad when he talked about the fire and losing his family.

There is also a few grammatical mistakes in the story(I'll only point out one though)

I can feel the tears threatening to come again, and I will them to not

I don't know what u meant here buy "and I will them to not" probably 'and I will not let them' or and 'I will make them not to' or something, it kind of confused me. Besides that the story is good so far keep up the good work :D

Idareutoguess
Lani Lenore chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
Despite the cold atmosphere, this story gives off a warm feeling in places, though the ending is certainly bittersweet. Overall, a very good story with lots of feeling. Longer than some of the other pieces, but that’s often better, I feel. It gives the opportunity to really express your character and what they feel. I’m glad to see you spent this time with your character – or characters. I have to suspect that the dragons are different parts of his own personality; perhaps parts that he lost. The prompt was incorporated really well by using the dragon statues and a vague notion of the words.

Congrats on winning the Dec contest!
taerkitty chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
Congratulations on winning the December 2009 Campanella with this piece.

It's well written. It's very smooth, to start with. There are a few disorienting moments, but they're part of the story - deliberate introduction of his madness.

The start of the story is easy to get into. It's not very compelling, but it attracts because it's not challenging, not at first. The introductory question isn't as strong as I'd like, but the middle makes up for it.

The ending is sharp. It is a little manipulative, but not very. This is a holiday story - it's supposed to some sort of redemption or reconciliation theme

The last line is wonderful. Madness or no, I can feel the pain, the fear, and the temporary elation.

Overall, the piece works. It's a short piece, so the tragedy feels a little rushed. I'm not sure if you're working under a word limit, but the piece feels like it could use a bit more length describing the fire. It's functional, but it's not evocative or sympathetic.

I like it very much for the emotions it stirs in me. Thank you for writing it, and for sharing it.
sophiesix chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
Congratulations on the Campanella award! there was a lovely tragic atmosphere to this that was nicely contrasted, and at the same time as being supported by, the dragons. i love how the dragons spoke sort of modern day teen, compared to the more formal speech of teh narrator, that was really quirky and cool. again, congrats!
SLMC chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
That's REALLY good! I love the ending and I love the dragons. They have cool personalities. Especially love Beowulf.
Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
Herro there. I could have reviewed Harry McGilligan to be honest since I believe it's your top priority work. However, I'm having a bit of headache now and that more or less prevents me from reviewing stuff post three thousand words effectively by my own estimation. :( So yeah, hopefully this review will suffice for now.

Okay, basically I really like the setting of this story. I don't know where you get your inspirations exactly, but this is a good work in terms of originality. I really like the way you portrayed the narrator as someone being tortured by his past up till the point where he had developed a certain extent of mental illness. I also like the way on how you entwine the flashbacks into the narrator's own mind. That was a very good job done.

If there's anything I can suggest in improving, it will be the fact that you can actually flesh out the narrator's anguish and hurt here. To be honest, you've done the skeleton in a detailed manner, but I feel you could have expand on it in terms of details on the possible exploration. Apart from that, nothing much to say. And yeah, I'll have to end this review by saying my country sucks in it's own mental patients' welfare system. I won't say it's extremely screwed, but at least you can say it's inadequate. :S

P.S: Pay back this review via The Eternal Grail. :)

-From The Roadhouse. :)
Palm Tree chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
First I do so love the picture you sited, or well, the words attached to it since they were so deep and gave me a thing or two to think about. Of course, it's only fitting that this short story, inspired by such a wonderful thing, leaves me with the same feelings. I am very much fond of anything that involves events that are all potentially in the protagonist's head so this was no doubt enjoyable all throughout. The statues, all with their own personality, were entertaining and it seems you're either quite knowledgable or have done a good amount of research on schizophrenia. The flashback involving the fire was executed without err. It offered not only that vital look into the past but the vital look deep inside the main character's head, his sorrow, his guilt. It endeared him to me. You manipulated your words well and this whole thing was a perfect snapshot into an unfortunate situation topped off with an ending to warm any heart this holiday season. ;D -shot- But, really, no, your imagery put the "awe" in awesome and just reading that end I felt closer as well as that much more thankful for my own family. That's why this is holiday gold and you should be extremely proud.
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