|Reviews for The Wildest of Tales|
| Miss Instant Noodles chapter 15 . 6/28/2013
Wow, I absolutely loved this story! It was just so interesting and unique. I admit, I'm still a bit confused about the whole Belle-and-Tony thing that happened with the real George Belle, but I suppose I'll just have to reread that part again to get it. This was really a great story!
| Greenie10 chapter 15 . 6/11/2012
This was a great story! I loves the fact Joseph was a tiger for the most part. Last chapter was really tense!
Will probably check more of your stories :)
| Piglet chapter 3 . 10/27/2011
Trick or treat, smell my feet, give us something good to eat! I thought I'd be a little tricky, per the season, and read further into the chapters to give you some feedback instead of the first chapter.
The first chapter made me think of Harry Potter with Hermionie maybe getting expelled haha. Also, the mirrors make me think of vampires. Is that waht Belle is?
"something the real Belle would've said" I like how sinister this sounds, whether you intended it or not. Makes me think the "real belle" is out there somewhere, maybe waking up in Philly and wondering where his circus went. Makes me wonder what this imposter Belle is, too.
"Pity he didn't roar. That would've sent them running." haha! Your narration is snappy and I like that a lot. Very distinct voice and that's awesome.
Oh so there's more to Tony than meets the eye! Sneaky sneaky!
"I'm just going to talk to him." I said dismissively.
I think there's supposed to be a comma on this dialogue tag
"I insist." Taking one of the buckets from him, I found it heavier than expected. "Honestly..."
I would've put these dialogue bits on the same line.
The walls were bare save for a few splotches that had marked them over the years.
This read awkward and I still don't know what you were trying to say! "themselves", perhaps?
I did like the last comment about the lack of mirrors, it kind of rubs in our face a little bit about how little we still know! You did a really good job about giving us certain information and still keeping us in the dark about other stuff. But you gave us just enough to keep us interested. Great fun!
| BrokenFacades chapter 15 . 3/29/2011
wow, this was good! Its the first story I have read on this sight and I must say that I was not let down. Thanks for the great read! Do you have a FF account as well I wonder...?
haha well, one again: very good story
| lianoid chapter 15 . 3/20/2011
I took a deep breath, felt my skin sigh in relief as the soft Southern breeze kissed it, and realized that's why I was mad.
-I love the alliteration here! It was subtle, and that's what I really enjoyed about it-I read the line and thought it was a lovely description and then realized there was some alliteration in there, ha-ha. Great stuff.
Ack, I'm so worried right now. I'm pretty sure Belle changed Joseph into him and he's pretending to be Joseph. On the edge of my sight right now!
Great ending! I'm so glad you allowed them to have that little moment peace, but also because not everything was resolved-Tony and Jim not being changed back. I thought that was great because as much as I like everything to wrap up nicely, I think leaving it open works better, since it makes it seem more realistic.
Brilliant story, Sir! I'm sorry it took me so long to come and review the last couple chapters. This was so much fun! You're such a great writer! I look forward to your next novel!
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| lianoid chapter 14 . 3/20/2011
You worked in this flashback scene incredibly well. I like how you end the previous chapter with panic, and begin this one with the comforting memory of home. It makes for an impressive contrast, and this opening flashback scene slows things down before what I expect will be quite a finale.
Ah! I was right, the second part of this chapter is intense! Man, you shifted the pace perfectly too, I love it! The first part with the flashback was slow, and then you brought us back to present (seamless transition, btw) and then everything gradually became crazier and crazier.
Your writing is top-notch as always. You provide just enough description to enable readers to visualize everything without ruining the flow, and it's brilliant. Really great chapter, Sir! I look forward to the conclusion!
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| sophiesix chapter 15 . 3/19/2011
“"You can't just leave me!"/But he did. And that infuriated me.” Haha love that. Though the last sentence felt maybe a bit tell-y? if you had something about fury boiling up inside her, or something, that might transform it into more of a show? Oh hang on, I see you’ve got that later, lol.
“I was mad because I had the sinking feeling that my own impulsive actions had caused this mess, and now people might die in this burning hellhole.” Maybe bring in the element of fear here? And snaking beneath that anger… or something?
“Tony ran to the edge of my fingers and, I swear, pointed in Cody's direction with his front paw.” Haha love that, the ‘I swear’ bit.
“"How?" My question seemed heartless,” I don’t think its heartless, I think its logical. If she’s to save him she needs any clue she can get on how belles doing it.
“it hit me how un-Joseph-like Joseph was acting.” Quite true :)
“"Sorry," I said, blushing.” I think you drop the ‘said’ there and just go with “Sorry.” I blushed. Because it flows better with such a fast paced high tension scene plus, you’ve got growled and snapped above ad below, so its less repetitive, structure-wise, that way?
“found its way into her hands.” uh oh!
“it was looking at the world through a dirty piece of sound glass” this is kinda nice, but you don’t actually need it either. You show it so nicely afterwards, see?
“Rawrar?” LOL! though its great and a relief, in a way, that he's human again, i also really love that there's this transition, these tiger elements still X)
“you can hug back” aw
Wonderful, wonderful ending!
and fantastic story as a whole. You paced it brilliantly, it never sagged, it really was a wild tale! i fell in love with teh characters, and your descriptions are beautiful. really looking forward to your next work!
| thefaultinourpatronus chapter 4 . 3/9/2011
I like how each character has a completely different mindset, way of doing things, thinking, etc. You've done a really good job in establishing how different the characters are, especially Belle and Sarah!
The descriptions were also fantastic, as usual. Especially the parts of Belle's magic. They were really descriptive and it showed how much Belle loved her job. She sure is evil...
| Compton chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
I did enjoy this one scene you really described the fall very well. I actually saw the fall like a movie it was very descriptive.
The dialogue is great too. Sometimes I did feel some dialogue was forced but most of the time it flowed together in harmony.
| Rainbow35 chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
I liked the confusingness at the end bit, because it's interesting and mysterious, and makes me wonder what was going on.
I didn't like the fact that it's set in 1898, but that's just because I don't like things that are set a long time ago, I'm not sure exactly why.
I also liked the way Joesph dealt with being interrogated, and that he was able to keep calm and lie convincingly.
| Canaletto chapter 5 . 2/12/2011
Very good chapter, as always. Lots of characterization here for Belle, all of it interesting. A bit on the side for the other main characters as well, and the subtle interaction between Belle and her victim were very well done. I felt Sarah seemed a bit over eager to join the circus, considering what she has learned about Belle, and how more subdued her character seemed to be in earlier chapters.
Still, very entertaining chapter. Seems like the plot is going to pick up now that Sarah is out in the open and she and Joseph/Casimiro are going to be partners.
| thefaultinourpatronus chapter 3 . 2/8/2011
Wow, powerful chapter! I like how you've written Bella's POV - I was sympathetic, but then, not so much! She's definitely determined, I can say that! I'm extremely curious about Bella, though. What is she hiding from? I'm actually considering she's a shapshifter. Hmm.. Otherwise, great job on revealing information, it was subtle and nice.
| thefaultinourpatronus chapter 2 . 2/5/2011
The humor and jokes throughout is hilarious! XD Belle's dry humor is especially fun to read. I like how every character has their own distinct voice. It's cool how Sarah and Tiger are so curious about Joseph. I didn't get the POV change at first, but when I read it again, it made sense. Good job on the chapter :)
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| thefaultinourpatronus chapter 1 . 2/3/2011
Love the opening. The vivid scenery of the train the the images in the mirrors are a great start. Usually, I wouldn't like the action in the beginning, but the fact the you didn't really reveal it all at once helped! I love the character; he's absolutely hilarious. Like wherever he lies, you give us the facts about it.
The ending is interesting. A tiger? Great cliffhanger!
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| lookingwest chapter 15 . 1/31/2011
OMG, this is the last chapter, isn't it? I just saw the "FIN" when I came to click the review button. Squee! I knew it was completed but for some reason my mind did not compute correctly. Alright, here we go! So excited!
Aw! I LOVE the way this ended! Fabulous! I have no criticisms for this chapter either, which is making this awfully hard for me to actually critique, so again, I fail at that, but I'll do my best to point out the things that were working for me.
As a whole, first off, this entire story is lovely. Everything is well paced, it's just well constructed, the characters are well rounded, and it's a wonderful adventure that ends on a note that could hint at there being more adventure ;)
Bravo with the whole action scene with Belle and wrestling the gun and the "real" Joseph and everything. I'm so glad that she changed him back and I like the way that you justified it with the "well maybe Cody would just shoot whoever", that was a good idea and it was well constructed. I also liked that you left Tony still a mouse and some things open ended. I was thinking that maybe the spells out unwind once she died, but I'm glad they didn't, because it might give us some more story later, no?
The dialogue was great, a special highlight was the way Joseph talked, of course. I think that was justifiably realistic and it provided some humor as far as relief goes after that climax. Just wonderful.
Overall I'm very impressed, and you should be very proud of this, it's great, well rounded, and I respect you highly for also keeping up with editing throughout. Great job Sir, I hope to see more from you in the future, and from perhaps these characters as well. Sarah and Joseph worked as a great balance and dimensional character team.