i like how they are already together... they are together right?

anyway, i like how its not something complicated its just sweet and short and easy 2 read. i like it all alot. actually i think i love it. it keeps growing on me the more i think about it lol.

the little japs at the cliched stories are funny, i love em but i also love 2 make fun of em.

shes squishy 2 which is nice, i dunno why but it is. :D.

very cute;D.

Hmm... It could happen. You've great writing chops, more importantly. Cheers!

I like it. Especially the fact that I expected a completely different second half :-) I mean, who would have guessed that they are together already? *gg*

Well done, thanks for sharing!

I love how there is 'squishiness'. It just puts that little bit of comedy in it. He sounds so sweet. Makes you smile too.

These totally make you feel good inside. And how they met was cute too. Just an average meeting.

Love it!

~*~Ngoc1231~*~

dont change anything, except maybe a few spelling errors, but im not even sure you had any . . . i dont really pay attention to that, anyway, i loved it, keep it the same:)

I like squishy too. HAHAHAHA! Keep writing. :)

He is such a sweetie. :) I love this.

You know, I think this is the most realistic one shot I've read to date. I love the fact that you didn't make him say I love you.

It's very simple but with all the little gestures and his attitude towards her, you've told us a million times he loves her, just not in so many words.

I really like the fact that she's insecure, I can really relate to this and I think you have done a fantastic job with it. :)

i think it was totally awesome. it's nice reading a story abt love btw ppl who r closer t normal. like how hunter loves jane even tho she isnt to-die-for hot. n her insecurities r v real. gd job!

Oh I definitely liked it; I almost thought you were describing me in the first paragraph! (I haven't had P.E. in three years since entering at a polytechnic! LOL) I am a little squishy myself, though friends say it's not obvious and stuff, o

I enjoyed reading this, it's kinda like something what every girl wants eh? Hehehe. I want a 'Hunter' in my life too!

This makes me feel so hopeful. Because that first paragraph is me. Like, it explains me exactly. I might steal it to put in the "About Me" section of my blog. And so because I'm a 'bit squishy' as you say, I sometimes wonder if I'll ever find someone who will love me despite my love handles and my not so flat stomach. Someone who's at least decent looking. (Because I really don't want my kids to be ugly.)

So, thank you for writing this. I love it. Mostly because I totally relate. But it was also well written. I wouldn't be reviewing if the writing was anything less than good. Because I'm too nice to tell people that they aren't very good. So, this is going in my favorites because I just like it that much. :)

aww. too cute.

I liked how you'd combine the description of their past and what's happening in the present. A lot of authors only seem to do it in lumps, as in a big long section about their pasts and what they were like, then a long section that happens now... y'know?

P.S. I love the name Hunter. I was so surprised when I saw it in the story! XD

extremely cute. :)

Hahaha

She sounds alot like me...for some strange reason...hm...

hehe

There are a few errors, like 'me' instead of 'my' and i think once you forgot captials, but other than that, it was great!

Keep writing.

Great one-shot, I really enjoyed it.

The one thing that irked me was the numerous references to sex; I don't know, I just felt like it was sometimes unnecessary. Meh. Maybe I am just too much of a prude.

Anyways, good job and keep writing!