I was waiting for the giant, but I'm ok with that not being added. I loved the dancing part.

It was definitely worth the wait don't worry! I really liked the fact that Lily put up a fight-you can see that her character is gradually growing!

Can't wait for more!

Oh btw im going to start comparing this to published books. Just since your looking to get published i thought i might as well:D

I must admit the only thing i have read wich had writing that drawed me in like your story was robert jordans.

I dunno wich i like better though. I think it might be this. Theres just something so...enthralling about your writing. That dance scene really dragged me in and i felt like i was there.

When she was going through crowds and she was brushing past epople, i dunno, the way you described the diffrent feelings was really well done.

I like how you go into the diffrent races wihtout giving to much detail and going overboard. I found the race part of this chapter the hardest to compare, becuase i hav'nt really read many stories without alot of races. The closest i guess would be Tolkien, but he didnt have as many races as you and i lik eyoures better. Very nice description of the undead fairy.

So well done and when i compared to other published works, youres ranked with the greats...

Although im only sixteen so i hav'nt really read many Popular adult fantasys, read alot of teenager fantasy though.

Cant wait till next:D

You updated! I have to say this ones one of my favorite chapters yet! I love how she finally has a bit of a backbone and I cant wait for the next one... Good luck.

I am so happy to have found this story and the preceding one too. I enjoy reading and can't wait to read more. Your imagination is unbeleivable and your writing skills superb.

There's no way to describe this chapter but as magical. I love the way you write. Lucien is beautiful and enchanting and I just love it. You say you're not happy with the chapter, but I was completely captivated. I felt like I was in Disney World reading this because it was so magical...which I've said like twice now. Haha.

Anyway, I think this is one of my favorite chapters so far. I can't give you a specific reason, but I think it was just the feeling and the descriptions.

Please excuse any weird wording. It's 4 AM where I am and I should be in bed :)

The three weeks weeks was worth the wait;)

Excellent chapter! Luce was written beautifully! I have to say that I was looking foward to the giant, but am not devastated that it wasn't in there. The chapter was great! Don't worry, you're doing an awesome job with this book so far. I seriously cannot wait until Luce finds out that Lily is getting married, though. I mean if he's this possessive now, I can't even imagine how pissed he's going to be when he finds out that she's engaged. I can't wait for Luce to just discover who Lily is in general. He always seems so caught up in getting her to let loose and be like him that he never seems to try to figure out who she is and how she's been raised. I'm also really interested to see what Kris meant about Luce being "more vampire than all the vampires in the city put together." Anyways, can't wait for the next chapter!

Ever your faithful reader,

Dramalover21

Don't worry. Three weeks is nothing. Great chappie! Update soon!

I love Luce. I love him nice. I love him not nice. I love him nicely dressed. I love him not nicely dressed. I love him naked.

I felt like this chapter was really good. I was worried about the awkwardness between Lily and Luce (their names sounds so cute together) but I think you wrote it out quite well.

But we knew that the tame-ness had to come to an end. I wonder how this "dancing place" will play out... I hope Lily doesn't get bit, she's been through so much already!

Keep writing your wonderful, wonderful story! And update soon! *wink wink*

HAHAHAHAHAHA! I love the phone conversation at the end! I'm so excited for the first date! And the second one! And the third one!

And I think I know where you are going with this Alec thing. At first I wasn't sure, but I'm pretty sure now. That will be an interesting development in the future. Lots of angst. Can't wait!

Keep up the great work! I love your writing!

when are you going to update! its been two weeks! hahah sorry. im impatient.

Hm I honesy need to find out what's going on with Alec! I, along with many other ppl, think he likes lily :s. Anyways cannot wait for next chapter. :D

My chest hurts when I read your story. That's a good thing.

As for Luce: I don't find him boring at all and I rather like it when he tries to be nice and considerate (though I probably wouldn't have liked it as much if he was that way all the time. Danger and misunderstandings can be so much fun!). Oh, and Lilith's reactions to the different culture is entertaining as well. Ooh! And how she reacted when the singer's magic didn't work on her anymore was interesting. One more thing: Like someone else mentioned, I also get the feeling that Alec likes Lilith like something more than a sister. Is that intentional?

I don't know if you've heard about this but letthewordsflow./

Let the Words Flow , wordpress should be a good resource for you. Its a site for FP authors looking to break out into the publishing world and its headed by SJ Mass, who is one of the most incredible authors this site has seen- and also a writer of fantasy. Authors from FP have made it out into the publishing world so it can definitely happen- it just takes a ton of patience, hard work and luck. Keep writing and I'm waiting for the next chapter!