Very nice, I like it a lot!

Short but very pretty. I liked reading your poem- loved it! :p

intense imagery.

short, but complete.

I especially loved the last three lines. The imagery here is beautiful, I can see the colors draining from the sky. I like how this piece is so abstract, and left to be interpreted in different ways. Great job

A rather brilliant piece you have here.

It is short, but concise to the point that

I actually felt very contented with the work

as a whole, despite the last word being "empty".

I particularly love the use of thirst as a metaphor

for desire-because thirst is one of the strongest

urges our bodies have. It's true when they say you can

go for weeks without food, but only days without water.

Simply beautiful :)

Wow, that was great. We thirst for beauty... I suppose that's true, isn't it? We're always searching for beauty, be it on TV or in people or in pictures.

At any rate, I love anything describing colours, because, y'know, colours are the best things that ever happened to Earth.

That was really breathtaking. Amazing work.

Cheers!

~writingpistachio

M. Provoking

a very nice one~~ the last line we shall drink the pretty sky...empty...omg this line is so awesome~good job~

Beautiful idea. :)

Beautiful. It's amazing how much you pack into so few words. Yes, "a thirst for beauty" is "the raw ripping thirst." There is so much beauty in the world, but no matter how much we drink of it, we always crave more.

nice, short piece.

interesting concept.

irrelevantly, it reminds me of this kids' book about goblins who drink the rainbow.

I liked how the word ripping actually ripped right through the poem in it's most literal sense!

I love that you paired "raw" and "ripping" together in the second line - the guttural 'r' sound is quite angsty and vivid. I also like that the last word is "empty" - suggesting that no matter how many colours the speaker sips, she still feels barren on the inside. That's quite powerful. :)

Very abstract, but i like it. It's got a tingling sense to it.

I love your abstract images, and this one seems to combine beauty with a certain disturbance. Striking :)