|Reviews for Broken|
| MistahFiction chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
Drama and tragedy are the two words I'd describe this poem. And- God. Depressingly good.
| i think that maybe chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
the repetition of "you sees" was almost exquisite. strike that- it's not one instance-your repetition/flow in general is always exquisite.
behind my (sad/excuse for a/) smile. so, so clever and well done.
(& i just noticed- useless & you are the only two words in bold. while i'm pretty sure it was unintentional, it's definitely an interesting spin- implying that part of the speaker blames this other for indeed _not_ being able to fix her.)
(curious- what song were you listening to that you refer to in the summary? the self-loathing reminds me of 'snuff' but that just may be because i have it on repeat like nothingother lately.)
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Very strong. :)
I like the addresing of the person at the end. :)