i think my previous post didn't go through.
I meant to say that so far, at chap 10, i like Stefan the most. Ryan and Caleb seems alittle ... lame. The videos and their whines. Even their comebacks or retorts at the present (the camp place) are so ... lame and childish.
I like how Stefan's easy going attitude. But i think Ryan is the main guy here according to your summary. :(
Maybe i''ll come around to like him more later.

wow. The way you write is very witty!
And even though nothing much has happened at chapter two, i can sort of figure what this protagonist is just by your writing.

And yes, i am very much intrigued by the story thus far. Cute boys and wild jungle. perfect. hhahahah. reading on now.

Holy shit, that's funny

Oh bad girls :) Stolen credit cards and motorbikes. Can't help feeling sorry for the admiral.

One of my favorite parts here was actually the portrayal of the admiral. How you describe him with just a few words, the part with the perfectly ironed pants and how he was looking a little rumpled and wrinkled today.

It feels like Tiff is really dominating this friendship/relationship between the two. Ellie gives the impression of being a bit of a follower and I don't have a proper grasp of her personality yet even though she is the narrator.

I read this chapter earlier and sorry if I'm returning late to review it. What strikes me the most is the characterization of Tiff. I love that she's like a 'guy' and that she's shameless about it. It's scary to think that as far as we have come with equality and all, we still are constrained by very narrow-minded expectations of what a 'good girl' does. Getting carried away, but I enjoy how strong and unique your characters are.

The flirting with Jacob and Samuel purely to get them to do the work for her, hilarious :). And that Tiff has no idea (and doesn't care) what they signed up for. All very entertaining. The whole idea with a camp in the middle of nowhere is a great setting. Lots can happen but there is no possibility of avoiding people in the long run.

Hi, Findus here dropping into return the favor. : )

This is such a fun beginning. I really like the informal style you're using. The descriptives are just enough and you keep it light. As prologues go, it does a fabulous job of drawing the reader in.

"The firmness of my headrest suggested a gym membership" tihi, you have many hilarious phrases in this short opening.

Though we find out very little about the main character in the prologue, I have an instant liking for her. Her voice, the expressions she uses, all very entertaining.

And my favorite (seems to be a common theme between our stories): "What the fuck happened last night?" - Thanks for a great read.

Great story-

About aus' climate- thats just because we're awesome, even though Vic is constantly being rained on...

Loving the Ryan/Ellie interactions, keep getting weird looks from family as I spontaneously burst out laughing

I loved this story (the downside)...and i really want to read your sequels! but it said you haven't completed stefan's or tiffany's...and i hate starting stories and they don't finish :(...are you planning on finishing them?

I was searching for a story to read when I cam across this one. I was hooked from the start. I finished reading it all in one day. So many things happened that I didn't expect. I loved how you included flashbacks to understand more about the characters and their past. The only thing that bugged me was the whole location thing. Sometimes you said that they were in Cambodia and other times you said Mongolia. Maybe you could make up a fictional place that has all the characteristics that you want.

This was such an amazing story and I loved it! Although, I was close to reaching through the screen and strangling you for that fake chapter as most readers probably were but seeing how I'm actually Australian, I think I would have had a better chance than them lol...does that sound creepy? sorry! lol also, placing the American version of Australian words was a good idea and if I were American I would have loved that but since I'm Australian, I found it a little annoying...but those were my only complaints! other than that I LOVED THIS! now off to the sequel!

well i am such an awful person for not review the end of my favorite story ever on this site. i must say i probably did it because i didnt want it to end lol but i am reviewing now! i loved it all, especially the ending, i just love those two together! great job!

Drama, adventure, didn't this story have? I'm almost totally speechless- and I'm not too good with words- But all I gotta say is that this was an absolutely fantastic story. :D I enjoyed reading it to the max!

the best chemistry in a story in such a long time! i love ellie, she is fantastic as a main character. and stefan, i heart stefan so much! he makes the chapter haha.

p.s. i'm pretty sure that you get your L's when you're 16.

Dude seriously?

I honestly tried to read this, but the lack of flow throughout the story bugged the hell out of me, not to mention all the grammatical errors. Good try.

Hahahaha the moment i read the part where ellie shot herself i figured this was either a prank or Ryan's drunken , i sadistically love tragic endings so i read on after confirming my suspicion by scrolling down to the author's note. :) Well written though, very dramatic...no matter how unrealistic the plot for this chapter was.