|Reviews for Mask|
| thewhimsicalbard chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
I think your title could have been better for the poem. Whatever the title is, your reader will be thinking about that the entire way through the poem. Your ending is much less dramatic (which is your goal, is it not?) because of your title.
The only other possible thing that you could improve is your word choice. You need to pick stronger words, especially verbs (do I sound like your English teacher? Sorry...), but your nouns need work too. Stronger words will make your poems mean more.
Actually, one last bit... The best poems about love often never include the word "love."
| rockettwriter4 chapter 1 . 12/30/2009
very very powerful imagery and details! there are a few little things i would have done differently but overall this was a great poem!
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 12/30/2009
This is lovely. I love the idea of a 'broken mask'. :)