Reviews for OneGirl
Lunaryon chapter 80 . 11/27
*squees* Oh my god it's back!


I don't remember anything that was going on.

HEY! That means I get to go back and read from the beginning of Singer all over again! YAY
Lovelygyrl96 chapter 80 . 11/26
So when I saw you update like a day ago my immediate reaction was MOTHER FUCKING HELL YEAH BITCHES. So I read the new chapter and decided to go back to Singer and re read that and re read OneGirl because I was like I need to refill my self with this absolute amaziness of a story. Lol so here I am just officially finished both in a day in half. I would of did it faster but thanksgiving preparation held me up so yeah. Anyway point is I'm happy your back because I genially love and enjoy this story. So I'm here waiting patiently for you too update lol so yeah until next time lovely. ;)
Guest chapter 80 . 11/24
It's always good to see more Rachel and Jessie shenanigans.
tacobby chapter 80 . 11/24
Holy cow! I'm sure the look on my face when i got an update notification for this was beyond comical. I'm so glad you picked this back up :-)
Guest chapter 80 . 11/24
Wehlin toth here. *raises hand* i remember well and have been patiently waiting for the continuation. Thanks for updating and *raises a crown and coke* heres to hoping it continues on. I have missed these two characters, Tah. Good chapter Keep it up. :)
randomwolfie chapter 80 . 11/24
Yes! Yes! Yes! When i saw that this had been updated i squealed like a little school girl, this made my whole week i dont think anything can knock me down from this high xD the fact that you just jumped right back into it with what feels like effortless writing abilities just blows my mind. I meam not alot of people can do that but man you are one of a kind. I cant wait for the future of this story/novel ill be waiting patiently for the next one thank you so much for this

Random Wolfie
romancejunky chapter 80 . 11/24
Wow this has truly been a long time coming. I kept this on my alert list in the odd chance that you posted again and I am so glad I did. I hope to see this series continued and I'm ecstatic that another chapter has finally been posted.

Grand Witch Alliance chapter 80 . 11/23
I'm so happy you finally updated. Yes, I did have to go back to the last chapter to reread and get a sense of what happened last. I actually was disappointed the chapter was short, before realizing that all the other chapters felt longer only because I read 159 chapters consecutively. The amount of time it took to read a chapter before hitting the Next button actually felt right.

I do hope you get to the part involving the talking with the parents about Rachel soon. And not just overhearing what Jessie says from Rachel's point of view. It honestly feels like the type of thing that should be done in Jessie's point of view, but you already did Jessie in this chapter and Jessie's already at her parent's house and with the current pacing it feels like you'd just skip over it. Not that I'd hate you or anything, but I'd love to see how you resolve the conflict with the parents.
Zefeh chapter 80 . 11/23
HOLY SHIT! I saw this shit and was like . . . . she's back?! How heavy was the mountain of dust on that keyboard?

I always remembered this story (Got me on a BFMV kick for A DAM YEAR! THANKS! :D) I barely remember the chapters before this but I guess I'll have to brush up. This makes me want to start browsing Fictionpress again (FF has so much more traffic sadly T_T).

Look forward to reading some of your stuff again! Are you moving alot of your "business" to patreon subscriptions? Sometimes those subscriptions get so stupidly large you can live off them so I don't see why one shouldn't be able to use FP in conjunction with that! (Seems like a dam brilliant idea as I've seen it with some indie games).

So Welcome back Trick! Hoping to 'Stay awhile and listen" to your awesome stories again!
Kisuru-chan chapter 80 . 11/23
Okay, so
I'm that one person that's followed this story since high school and Singer (I believe?) and I've never said anything. Yeah, but it's always nice when you update!

I have a lot of thoughts about this story, but since it's been so long since I read the chapters, I"ll just keep it brief to this chapter.

I'm glad that it seems like Jessica is making her decision to be with Rachel and it finally feels like it's a choice she's making without pressure. Well, there's pressure, but it's heated passion? Ha... And I love the devil icons Rachel sent knowing what must have been on Jessica's mind.

I wonder if Jessica's parents have anything they want to say to her now that she's there, or if things will just skip back to Jessica back with Rachel...
The Fabulous Killjoy chapter 80 . 11/23
Well, now. Here's something I haven't read in a long while... Still did a happy dance, haha. Anyway, a shorty, but a goody. Hopefully this hiatus of yours has come to a close. I'm very eager to pick this story back up.
Lovelygyrl96 chapter 79 . 8/3
Grand Witch Alliance chapter 79 . 7/20
I love OneGirl for reasons different from Singer. This story seemed a lot more realistic than Singer in terms of progression/speed of their relationship. This story also seemed to emphasize its weaknesses as well from past to present. Overall, I think plot was better in Singer but characterization(?does relationships count?) was better here.

One thing I wanted to point out:
Since the story was written in first person POV, I felt there were certain points in which the way the person was thinking seemed a bit odd. In the case of Jessica, there were several points that said "older woman" to refer to Rachel. That would be accurate, but since you're writing in first person POV, I felt like it would've been more adequate to write something like "my girlfriend" or just plain Rachel or "her/she". If the same thing had happened in Singer, than I didn't really catch it then.

Otherwise, I overall really love what you've done for the series so far. There's close to zero issues with grammar and whatnot, so it's fluid and easy to read. Your dialogue is written in a way that it's easy to tell whose speaking. Thanks for the excellent read.
SuperSaiyan2Goku chapter 79 . 5/24
How on earth did I managed to read this and Singer in one day? The story is fantastic! I look forward to the next chapter. :)
Guest chapter 79 . 3/31
You never gonna complete this right? Such a shame..its an awesome story.
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