Reviews for Insatiable: Breathe
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 10 . 1/16/2010
Love it!

"You see writing is my vice.

You see the pen is my knife

and the paper is my skin-

I like to carve my pain into it

and watch my words bleed."
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 9 . 1/16/2010
Love it!
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 8 . 1/16/2010
Love it!

"My eyes drink you in since you glow

in the light of the moon as her

light kisses your flesh."
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 7 . 1/16/2010
Great!
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 6 . 1/16/2010
Love it!
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 5 . 1/16/2010
Great!

"I love to be beneath

your powerful lithe frame.

Hear low growls and your

warm breath on my neck

as you sink your teeth into me."
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 4 . 1/16/2010
Great!
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 3 . 1/16/2010
Great!

"I want to be the girl

you wake next to at every dawn.

The girl you tell your friends about-

that I'm the one you can never leave."

"Wake me if you're real, baby.

If not- just let me sleep."
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 2 . 1/16/2010
Love it!

"I won't open my eyes

so you won't fade

away in the light of day.

The doubt wash away

with your smile,

and I know that only

I can put it there."
Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
Great!

"I've never let anyone into

this room before.

Why are you the first?"
FelleLLoyd chapter 4 . 1/4/2010
Hm, I think I've read this before.(Is This The Edited Version?) Though, I think I prefer the original one.
Mirabella chapter 2 . 1/3/2010
This is my favourite so far!

"under the stars-

a blanket sky." - lovely!

"Dusk sets in

with your embrace" - beautiful!
Mirabella chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
Wonderful!

"The pieces of me I kept safe from the world" - you had me at the opening line! :)
Princess-anna57 chapter 2 . 1/1/2010
Great job. I like the first stanza best. Keep at it!

Anna _
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 1/1/2010
Very good poem and I like the last stanza; it's very powerful to me. Keep writing!

Anna _