Wow. The whole concept behind this story is really interesting. The only problem is a few spelling errors but nothing major. A really good story, are you writing more?

aw. that is sad.

wow! I am simply blown away! I love the whole mystery and supernatural feel you get out of it! You are a remarkable writer :)

Please keep writing!

liked the certainty of you knowingyour heart was going to stop. its always good when you twist a cliché like "my heart dropped/stopped" and added your own twist to it.

lovedlovedLOVED the imagery of fire on paper,leaving nothing but ash.

a good part you could add here could possibly be of saying how the ash (along these lines) ruined the metaphorical lungs, possibly,and if that makes any sense.

brilliantstart.

This is a short prologue but brilliantly written. Great descriptions, very intriguing and i'm curious to see what happens next, again great start.

oh! ok, i get it now. cool, musical voices. i like that power!

are they superheroes or something? or is this just like a magical land where there are different persons. but remember, dont tell me, i want to find out.

and btw, i am going to review every single chapter in this story, so you will have a lot of reviews. XD

alright... now what is a voice?

wait, dont tell me, i want to find out.

ok, here we go. i likeses.

I liked it, a very good read, especially what with the mood I've been in. I felt as though you were trying to flit around what a Voice really is since your description is always so vague.

Okay, so these Voice creatures are rare, dangerous, good, bad etc. Interesting.

Some minor technical errors: 'To many things to name off right now.'

suggested edit: 'Too many things to name right now.'

Other than that, it sounds like a promising story.

Well, in this very brief prologue, you've effectively described this apparently different version of Death. Good writing too. Sorry I can't make the review longer.

YAY! LOve!

I love the transportation really beautifully done.

"Transporting was fun. The feeling of every cell you had being made smaller and taken apart was an unexplainable sensation. Less than a tickle but more than a touch. Sort of like the wind on your skin with light, warm rain. It was way different though. Again unexplainable."

I can really vividly see and feel it, gunna be thinking about this one for a while.

Wonderful job. By far an amazing story so far.

I like that we're getting an idea of what "The Voice" is. However, I feel like we haven't really gotten into the story yet. In so far, we've only heard from this girl's POV, but no *actions* have transpired. I feel like chapter two and three should almost go together and that we should start seeing other characters and how they interact.

Cassandra