Reviews for Fall Apart
Isca chapter 1 . 1/5/2010
"I didn’t know it was possible to shake so hard and not fall apart." The angsty tone of this line is very vivid and impactful.

"I'm just a waste. I'm just a failure." God, the speaker is so emotionally raw here - it makes for a great read.
4tehlessthan3of0scoreintennis chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
I feel like this sometimes...
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
I liked all of your embellishments in this piece. The use of ‘lowercase’ added a youthful degree to the piece, and help the plight full nature of the verses become more evident to the reader.

However having said that the plight full tone was there, I have to say that piece came across as a bit whinny at times, which I didn’t like. It was deeply personal (that was very evident) but it just felt like words to me, I didn’t feel that you were ‘saying something’ more just observing emotion.

Much love,

Juliet.