|Reviews for His Captive|
| gulistala chapter 15 . 7/8
This chapter made me cringe just a little bit and the not so credible characterisation. It feels like Faolan's too quick in accepting Gint's words- and it happens all so quickly, Faolan coming back to find Vin and them making up again etc. Going by their characters from previous chapters, I'd expect a bit more stubborness and resistance?
Anywho, I'm reading this story for the second since I'd liked it so much the first time around! Kinda wish Book 3 would be a thing with Chantilly but oh well.
| Rigel chapter 28 . 3/19
Had to roll me eyes more than a few times and not just because of the "mate" theme. I'm having a difficult time trying to grasp this world. They seem like in a sort of Renaissance age but they also speak freely of genetics and use contemporary slang.
I'm not into the story at all. You're no doubt prolific, but you should polish the culture and time frame of your own world.
| somersaultkick chapter 39 . 11/1/2015
This is so amazing. I am confused though about the King stopping the war for just one girl, though I'll take it as his brain getting malfuctioned due to the deadly poison by Faolan(as much as I want to dismiss this excuse, I need to as a respect to your own way of writing the resolution).
Ughh I want more scenes of Vin and Faolan! Pretty please :)
I'm going to read the part 3 now. Thank you for letting me read this wonderful story.
| Guest chapter 24 . 1/13/2015
In the last chapter's scene with Killian and Chantilly, she told him that she'd only ever been with two men, but in this chapter, Killian tells Kirby that no doubt she's been with countless men. This could be the correct order of plot . . . but there's no hint of Killian's having heard Chantilly's own statement.
| Guest chapter 21 . 1/13/2015
Typo (in a third-person section): As Killian opened the small door again, I shot Kirby a confused look.
| Guest chapter 11 . 1/13/2015
Mistborn is quite something, isn't it? I've yet to meet that series' like. . . .
| Guest chapter 10 . 1/13/2015
Of course, you seem to have made her much stronger than the normal female. . . .
| Guest chapter 8 . 1/13/2015
Well, I hope she has more-than-human abilities, if she can catch an arrow mid-flight and proceed to kill an off-screen character with it. Because training with swords does not account for that.
If there's a logical explanation, I have no complaint
| Guest chapter 7 . 1/13/2015
Pretty sure "...make sure she was no weapons" is a typo. Sorry about its existence!
Your story is well worth reading.
| vampgirlnumba13 chapter 39 . 11/17/2014
Oh my darling writer, this was absolutely positively wondrous. It made me grin like an utter child and I simply couldn't put it down. I read "His Queen" long ago, two years? Three? Unsure, but it was long ago. Then I recently reread it and saw you had another and I am so incredibly happy to say I wasn't disappointed. This was just as great as the first one, maybe even better! Oh but I loved it every step of the way. Fantastic job! And now I'm off to read Amarilla's story! XD oh the adventures you inspire in my mind are breathtaking, dearie.
| MileyRowling chapter 39 . 7/31/2014
Just as good as the last one! Have you posted the next book yet or did I miss it?
| ConeGriffin chapter 39 . 7/5/2014
How can he just leave! Just to kill a girl... abandon a whole kingdom he had almost won over!
The plot was so good until that point...C'mon! All that power! The ending could have been brilliant!
| TheUltimateAesSedai chapter 39 . 4/29/2014
Ive recently found your stories and have spent the last week reading His Queen followed by His Captive. Ive loved reading your stories and i could see your writing improve from one to the next. His Captive was definitely my favourite though. You are really good. Im not sure what is going on in your life but you stories have brought joy in mine this past week. So thanks.
| Lalaith chapter 11 . 11/27/2013
OOOkay, you're a great writer, and I love reading your stories, but this chapter sounded exactly like an episode off of Robin Hood. Also, it is impossible for one to shoot two or more arrows from a bow at the same time without causing damage to the bow or oneself. Additionally, you really can't do that and have both arrows hit different targets. It's just impossible, no matter how often you see it happen in movies. Take it from me, I shoot competitive archery.
| Blood-Drop chapter 39 . 10/15/2013
This is really good so far, keep it up! (please)