Reviews for deceitful lullabies
deefective chapter 1 . 1/10/2010
Hmm, I liked the first two beginning lines. They set the tone and flow for the rest of this and it was a nice, melodic way to start of a poem. I'm not really a fan of the rhyme, even though I get that it's supposed to resemble a lullaby. Hm, it wouldn't have bothere me so much if you hadn't repeated the "-ace" rhyme. As for the last stanza, that was my favorite. Lovely ending, great imagery and word choice. Nicely done.
WTP chapter 1 . 1/5/2010
Overall, I really like this poem because of the underlying concept. The idea of taking innocent verse associated with childhood and subverting them is god :)

Howabout MORE? I'm not completely up on my lullabies and so some may have gone over my head but I can only see "Go away, rain, rain" and "Rockabye baby" as references to them (except the rhyming). Yeah, I think really pushing lullabies would reinforce the solid underlying concept :)