|Reviews for Keeps|
| DefineBeauty chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
i think one thing that could better this piece is if you used periods for the first few lines instead of commas. i think it would flow a little better that way.
but overall i like this. an insider feeling of a "happy" family.
i like the first few lines the best. they're powerful in a sense. they make the poem.