Holy craps, why did you stop writing this stories for THREE YEARS?

I beg you to continue this story. Although the violence the story was so suddenly(I didn't expect that MUCH violence from the character), I still love this story.

So do continue this story! And have JamiexJames? :D I kinda want then together.

I have a couple questions. Why did this turn into some sort of competition and what is with the whole mark on the wall thing? And last of all why is crow engaged?

I am sooooo confused. You don't really explain WHY they all want to kill Pandora which makes it really confusing. I get that they want her to remember her past but why? What do they care?

You told me to press the button and so I did. This is the first review that I have done for this story. I would like to start off by saying that I really like this story and it fascinates me how bipolar Crow is. I am just wondering if he will ever tell her how she know's him. Please don'take him a brother! That would be weird.

I think that as you write you are kind of finding your way as a writer. I like the story and I hope you continue to write it, but I also think that when it is finished you should put it away for a little while and then edit it. I hope you update soon.

Okay. After looking through some of your reviews, I can tell that you don't get a lot of constructive criticism, which is something every author needs in order to progress as a writer.

The premise of this story is good, however the story gets very unbelievable. For example:

"Panny, where have you been? You've missed like, two weeks of school, and like, everyone said you've been kidnapped. But you haven't right, because we totally would have gotten a ransom note..."

If Pandora had been missing two weeks, then why didn't anyone contact the authorities? And again, if everyone said she'd been kidnapped, surely someone would have called the police. Why did everyone think she'd been kidnapped anyway? How would they have found out? Also, after someone's been kidnapped, I doubt they'd go straight to their best friends house instead of the police.

Another plot point that confused me, was the whole "my best friend has been pretending to be my friend this whole time and her father is evil" bit. That would just never happen. Ever. It just doesn't make a lot of sense to me.

Crow, as a character, was intriguing. I liked him, but his behavior was sometimes borderline abusive.

You should definitely consider getting a beta. Sometimes things in your story sounds fine to you in your head, but to someone else it may seem confusing or unreal.

The spelling/grammar of this story isn't too bad, but there were quite a bit of mistakes throughout the story.

Listen, I'm not trying to be mean or flame you. I applaud you for having the guts to post your stories online, which is something I've never been able to do.

Honestly, I really wanted to like your story. That's why I just want to help you improve. Don't take this review the wrong way.

HAHA. In my last review, I meant to say that Hunter had feelings deep deep down.o

Marla's funny...an assassin who does the happy dance.

PLEASE TELL HER WHO YOU ARE.

and you? Update.

See ya'

DO NOT GIVE UP.

I want her to tell Pandora who she is!

I bet Dean has some feelings. Deep deep down...

See ya'

Awww. That was so sad.

I loved the shattered mirror symbolism.

See ya'

REALLY TWISTED!

Her sister is alive?

This man is just crazy.

So dramatic.

See ya'

You used the wrong "their." It's, "They're never gonna know their dad," not, "Their never going to know their dad."

They're- they are.

Their- shows possession.

-x

P.S. I'd invest in a beta.

Thank you! I've been wanting an update for months! Great twist with her sister being alive, I can't wait to see what happens next :)

okay okay.

i'm only saying this because buffy was mentioned in chapter one.

but is he somewhat based off spike?

haha.

I miss this story :( I thought it was kind of an awkward jump from the last chapter to this one but that's okay:) POST MORE SOON!

good, and horrible. poor crow :(