This is great, I also read your story because of charliej.

This is great, thank you!

I love this story; however, you mix up your words sometimes. In one of the previous chapters you typed "feat" when it should have been "feet". You also have a tendency to use the wrong there(place)/their(possessive pronoun)/they're(contraction meaning "they are"). These are pretty minor mistakes, most likely typos. You're such a great writer-don't let a small thing like typos get in the way!

I feel you about the part where you said you aren't as gifted as all the other authors on Fictionpress! I too spend more time reading instead of writing. But you're really creative, innovative and hardworking. Good job :)

This story has been wonderful :) Your chapters are still steeped with mistakes though. You have spelling errors here & there. And you seem to like to use "your" instead of "you're" or "you are". It kinda annoying to read that. I like how you never changed Sam. She always remained independent in her way. I've gotta say tho, the chemistry between Sam & Marcus isn't really obvious in the entire story. You've got to work on that :) You know the family tree you mentioned in this chapter? What did the dotted line mean? I'm looking forward to the sequel! :D Hopefully, it'll contain lesser mistakes.

Eeee freaky. Why didn't the creep just abduct her?

When I read the title of your chapter, I literally winced cos you spelled 'Prologue' as 'prolougue' but then I read your chapter and I was surprised. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes. You wrote well. Though it's a little confusing.

What happened to the newer/edited version you were doing of this story? I thought I had seen it and maybe read some of it, but maybe you took that one down as well? Either way, the story is great.

Very original! I enjoyed it.

Marvelous story. It was breathtaking. I loved how Marcus and Sam acted all cute together. I hope you'll post the sequel soon! )

OrangeKiss

had fun reading this.

thank god that creep aiden is finally dead.

is this the end?

so, to start with, "grammer" should be spelled "grammar." ;)

Another great chapter! But I'm still undecided on how doggy Sam was acting, albeit cute and all.

Some proofing thoughts include:

Is she stuck like this can I have her?" - needs a question mark after this and c in can should be capitalized.

The boys name was Darren- apostrophe after boy and before s

creek- should be creak.

alphas name- missing apostrophe- should be alpha's

Hi! Really intrigued by the premise of the story and eagerly reading on. Just one thing: Twice 'rogue' has been spelt as 'rouge' in this chapter.

I really enjoyed this. Sam and Marcus are very cute together. I can't wait for the sequel.