Reviews for Bedtime Prayers
ranDUMM chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Hey,

That was a pretty good story :) It was scary the whole way through, but I found the ending a little bit anti-climatic. The twist with Tim always saying the prayers was great! It really finished the story off well. Great work :)

ranDUMM
I Am The Masquerade chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
Though the ending for this one was pretty obvious, I enjoyed it more than 'Stay Out of the Room'. It seemed to be written with more thought, and it didn't have the same thrown-together feel that the other one did. Good job.

-Masq
Octoberly chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
What a jacked up town. Gawsh. How do people keep moving there? Seripusly! A story I think you'd like is "The Diary of Joyce Rey", It's freaking creepy.
RaccoonQueen chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
Good night above. That was a little spooky, to say the least. Well written, and I like the fact that your stories fit together. All I can say is that I'm glad my closet isn't directly attached to my room. Heh. The only part that seemed rushed was when he left for the party and came back, I know that part of the story isn't all that important, but it seemed important to him. But once again, good story.

-Dixxy
bookwormbelle chapter 1 . 1/21/2010
fuck yeah!

I love it. Horror stories are the best and this is my favourite one of the three!

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BloodiedFreak chapter 1 . 1/18/2010
OOh, freakish stuff. I really enjoyed that, though i'm glad i didn't read it just before bed.

I really appreciate your good spelling and grammar, as so many of the stories I've read on these sites are so poor at it, that it distracts from the story.

Really well done keep it up.

R
WriterOnTheMove chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
Wow, i really love how you can take such a simple concept like a bed time prayer, or a Door, and turn it into a fantastic read.

What else will you write next i keep asking, and i'm looking forward to any unique future stories of yours

Elyssa
Maria Conklin chapter 1 . 1/14/2010
Awesome that was so cool!
AwesomeEyes chapter 1 . 1/14/2010
Wow! That was good! I loved it! Creepy...

Love Eyes
Sunshine1011 chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
wow... what a great read. That was just awesome. Sorry I can't give any constructive criticsm... it's perfect as is! I'll be sure to read more of your work later.
marshmallow wolf chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
LOVE IT! i really love the story!first i thought that it was a boring story but than WHAMMO it turned into a glorious one i love it maybe i should start praying...
Lee Daniel chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
Wow, this story gave me chills. It is a good thing I read it in the daytime. Well done. Is that the same boy in black clothing that was in The Door?
Silvren Raine chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
Nice horror story! I think I'm gonna have to pull the covers over me when I go to sleep tonight...O_O
SpicaCentauri chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
You have a wonderful touch when it comes to Horror stories. Are you making a series? Looking forward to more.

:)

*SpicaCentauri*
PencilSketchS chapter 1 . 1/11/2010
Poor, poor Timmy T.T And he's such a sweet kid. Though it's amazing how the monster in the closet seemed to obey the bedtime prayers rule. Maybe all it takes is faith, or belief. Joshua didn't believe, so he never stood a chance, right? I thought at first that Timmy was the young version of the kid in black. Him in the past, maybe, and that the person missing was someone else, because what about King? If King disappeared too, then that's two missing persons. And if King didn't... then why was it a missing person's case?

You're main characters, you know the ones who end up dying, all seem so impatient. But they're just kids who don't know any better. Why would they think that there immediate decisions and actions would be their last, or could help save their lives.

Is the kid in black Death? Does he manifest in person because of the monsters that cause the deaths of Charles and Joshua? Or does he just know how to find the monsters, and know what is going to happen out of experience?

I could keep wondering forever. Please let us meet this mysterious kid in black. Write a good long story about him now that you have captured our attention and made us so curious about him.

Keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward to more of your stories :D
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