|Reviews for Hard to Trust People|
| Herro my name is DJ Not Nice chapter 3 . 9/8/2010
weird but I like it so far
| nekogurl18 chapter 3 . 6/30/2010
GREAT STORY! but umm i wanna see flirtations etween sejii and yuki and stuff but esides thats its great and ur a really good writer and can u tell the readers somethin more aout yuki than a purple or comin out of him i didnt really catch on to that part amd the purple vones it would b grrat if u took somethin out of the show avatar and naruto cuz then it would b awesome
| PrincessJulius chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
yup. cool sounding, but some stuff sounds awkward...(lol, sorry! I'm saying it now! because i just took my AP english exam today so my brains working!) Anyway...here are some things i noticed... 1)"Damn why do I have to be demon if I were just human..." maybe add in a ! after '..have to be a demon!' 2)'Poor Yuki...all he wanted was to be cared for and be loved. If he only knew what it was." perhaps add a bit more about past...kinda too to add character? 3)"...shiny black hair and was combed in the back neatly and his bangs were loose and flowing in the wind so elegantly."-his shiny black hair was combed back neatly, his bangs loose and flowing elegantly in the [cool] breeze."
i think more detail should be in the dream, its a little too fast-paced...it might just be me, but it sounds really cool! i hope it isn't too much advice...don't hate me!
| faiswingedchronicles chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
The way you wrote this is better then your unlucky story. The writing style is abit more different although it kinda broke apart in the end. Maybe because of the tense you were using? IDK. but Im curious to see if this continues