I really want to know what is going to happen next and it's almost been a month since you last updated. I miss you and your writing skills. PLEASSEEE COME BACKKK ( I overreact sometimes)

I'm dying to know what was in that letter and who it was from. This is all coming together beautifully. I mean in the way the story was plotted. We can guess from that poem that Alys was abused, which is something I've suspected for awhile. Yet I don't know why Hayden's uncle thinks she's dangerous. There must be a lot more to her past than what has been revealed.

Hayden's past is also still mostly a mystery. What happened to his parents? What is the cause of the animosity between him and his uncle? You are 90,000 words into the story, and the mystery is still going strong. That steady, precise pace is part of why I love this story. It is neither too fast nor too slow. I marvel over your complete control of this story. You know where you're going with it and how to get there.

I don't think that I can comment on everything in this chapter in one review, so I'll end it here and write more later.

I am completely addicted to this story and these characters. I can't tell you how desperately I need an update to this; it's making me crazy. Please, please post a new chapter.

Please update soon! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Is there a problem with FP? I wrote a review days ago and it still hasnt turned up

Woah. Where are you? Has something happened?

Please, GOD, update this! I'm begging you O.O

You gotta update soon. Whew, that's me all caught up. Three cheers for Nightingales!

Okay, I'm going to be honest with you. If I was reading a published novel, and I was deep into the narrative...and there was suddenly a POV change. I wouldn't be best pleased. Because it isn't professional. No story I've ever read in my life, has done that to me EVER. But this is fictionpress...and you've buttered me up with 23 chapters...the last 8 more particularly...and Hayden's interesting anyway...

So I didn't put a black question mark against your name, just this once.
Because you're a talented, talented girl and this is your baby.

Wow. I like how you introduce the romantic angle - it's in keeping with the characters. I bet Hayden wasn't just hellbent on kissing her for appearance's sake, you know! Heehee. He appeared really pissed when she wiggled out from under him and ran for her cell! It makes me anticipate the next time they'll lock lips - there I've said it!

And...THAT CLIFFHANGER.
The feels! Just figures Hayden would be on the phone to her, when she drops it and makes him "worry." Will he rush to be at her side?

There are quite a lot (okay, more than average) typos in these last few chapters (I think in an earlier chapter...you typed career as carrier...but I'm ignoring them, because I still can see the gem, and the typos are not enough to distract me...much!)

Are there really on 2 chapters to go? Will you update soon? *sobs*

"He only lets me out of the basement on Tuesdays"
Crying with laughter. BEST LINE EVER!

Sixty thumbs up. LOVE THIS. Haha...I had half forgotten about that "date" - I'm excited now!

Just a word of notice : You really happen to favour the word "corral." I've noticed it being repeated at least 20 times now...and it's beginning to grind on me. Any alternatives? But other than that, this is slum dunk PERFECTION. From about chapter 16, each chapter is getting progressively better and better. You are swimming to dizzying heights. I feared Alys would fade, and be more "puppet-like" when Hayden first got his hands on her, and they wouldn't be matched in wit, but I've been proven wrong time and time again.

I mean, she even talked about greek mythology here! As Alys moved away from Hayden, back to Mrs Lexington, and Hayden followed her with that burning gaze...I could understand WHY. Alys is super compelling. Maybe even more compelling then Hayden, because I feel her intelligence is unparalleled to none. And the descriptions you use...like for the gym for example. Kudos. This story is satisfying my every need. Yeah...I think the best story I've read on here in months! (But ssshh...don't tell anyone else that.)

"But you're fine the way you are. Don't change that." God damn, fuck me sidways, but that was most "romantic" thing I heard...coming from him. Is romantic the word? I mean it made me swoon, but let's not kid ourselves that it falls in the lurrrvvve spectrum. Your later chapters are really something! I'm clicking through each chapter like my life depends on it! Oooh...if it continues like this, I will totally FAVOURITE this bad boy.

This chapter is my most favourite from you yet. What an interesting use of reverse psychology when Alys, gets her teacher to think he'd misheard a swear word, with her carefully played ignorance (not innocence!) and choice words. That seriously impressed me - at that moment she surpassed Hayden!

Hayden? Hayden! Are you taking notes?
From top to bottom, I loved this chapter.