Omg! I read this whole story I like two days! It is so damn good! I am literally dying to find out what is going on and what secrets have yet to be revealed! Ugh I can't wait for the next chapter! I really hope it is soon! My mind is a whirlwind trying to figure this puzzle out! Great job and I can't wait to read more!

Highly anticipating the next chapter! This one was beyond my expectations, keep up the great work. Your story is truly unique! (:

Maybe it's a letter stating her father is released from prison . .
Alys really tests haydens patience. I don't think he's had to deal with somebody like that. Good to hear from Karri..its been a while

Update please, dear one.

AHHH!

You do realize that with a cliff hanger like that, all I am going to be able to do is think about this story, which will either lead to me drawing, writing, or staring at my eMail until it updates? What have you done to me? This is just too interesting. It's the most interesting. I cannot even handle the amazing of this story. Normally I would try to specifically state my favourite parts, but I just... Can't even. I can't even. (Wow you have such amazingly well developed characters, and you really stay true to them. Oh my god how do you weave suspense like that and draw people in? What is this intense, electrifying, and intrinsic plot? How can you write a story about the real world and make it seem almost supernatural due to it being so...consuming? Wahhhh this is the greatest thing ever!) okay, I'm done.

I stayed up waiting for this, and it was even better than I anticipated. Wow! You called it a small chapter, but there is so much here. Wow, this story has so many layers, and it's so exciting on so many levels. Here I was dying to know the aftermath of that cliffhanger and you up the ante with an even more intense cliffhanger.

Okay first, I love how you handled her reaction to him. It had only a hint of what I was expecting, but that made it even more exciting. You build tension so well with restraint. That's your secret, apart from great writing of course. I'm going to read this many more times when I'm awake, but some things really stand out even with me being tired. Hayden telling her that she looks stupid made me laugh.

He wanted more, and I don't think all of it had to do with logic. I was as frustrated as he was by that phone call. But what a surprise it was, because I assumed it was her mother. So now I have my suspicions about the letter, and I might find out if I'm right tomorrow. I'll review more when I can think more clearly. Great chapter!

Please I beg of you post the next chapters together tomorrow. Don't drag out my torture this is me literally begging I'm in too deep with this story and I really want more. This story feels so...real. The characters are thoroughly developed and so far have brilliant arcs. They're devastatingly beautiful and I love how well the story flows and how the picture is painted (pun intended) so please post the next chapters :) This story is wonderful and you are a very talented writer, keep it up and update soon!

Okay, I had to log out again so that I could rant. Don't get me wrong. Everybody is certainly entitled to their opinions, but I felt I had to add mine in after reading one of your reviews. If everything was completely realistic, fiction would not exist. There are plenty of nonfiction books about mental illness. Those of us who are reading fiction don't want everything to be exactly like real life. Also, it gets my dander up every time I see someone make a generalization about any group of people. There are variations in personality among people with mental illness, just as there are among all human beings. We know that they don't all turn it inward on themselves, otherwise people wouldn't lash out at other people.

Please don't change your story. Your characters are unique, complex, and fascinating. Yeah, people in real life might not be this intriguing, but that's the fun of reading fiction. Alys and Hayden exist in your mind, and you have made them real to me.

Please debut the next 2 chapters together, and soon!

PLEASE UPLOAD THEM TOGETHER AND FASTER THESE ARE TOO GOOD

I love the way you put together descriptions. I watched his teeth flash against his smile. Making the pile of insults behind my lips fall suddenly short.

This chapter really enhanced the bond that's been forming between them. She shared a part of her past with him, and he reacted to it with emotion rather than just gathering information about her. It was another great glimpse into her mysterious past. Now we know how she met Karri, and that they've been friends for a long time. Of course, now you've added a new mystery. I'm wondering about the accident she alluded to in her thoughts. I imagine that it involved her father in some way.

Hayden is still an enigma. There is some hidden drama between him and his uncle. He obviously has something on the man if he can get him to do his bidding and lie about living with him. So many secrets!

Hayden is so resourceful and has such a devious mind. He concocts all these schemes upon schemes. But after reading this chapter again, I'm intrigued by Alys's observation that there was some new emotion behind his eyes. And the part right before that is brilliantly written too. He conveys intensity in a passionless way. He's absolutely the most fascinating male character I've ever read about in a romance story, but this is far from a typical romance story.

I've gotten to know Alys enough to guess that she will not react well to his "training." I got a kick out of his use of that word by the way. Honestly, though, I can't imagine exactly what she will do. All those drawings of him reveal her fascination with him. Unlike in most romance stories, she has expressed no romantic notions whatsoever. It's part of what has made this story so different. Even after this, I still don't know which direction it will take. Whatever happens, I do believe that it will change things between them. You can't undo what's been done.

I like drama, as long as it's not melodrama. I have no fear of that with you though. You are solidly building this story and developing the characters. I would be terribly jealous of your skill if I didn't love this story so much.

I don't know how I was expecting this moment would happen but with them I never know. The quip alys made up Randal being their threesome was funny . Hayden likes to intimate her by being very physically close to her.
I would usually be giddy when the couple I ship have such an intimate moment. But with Hayden I have to second guess his every intention. And be wary.

Its fine If your next update is on a weekend like you want. But the second chapter you post , two days later. When I read one chapter of this story I usually like to dwell on it and think about the situation. Because nothing is what it seems with these characters.
Good work! I love this story. Can't wait for the next :)

"he only lets me out of the basement on tuesdays" priceless XD

I love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter!
You always do a great job of leaving us hanging at the end of each chapter :)