Your story's amazing! Ugh really amazing. Thank you for writing this :)

I ache for Alys. And no, this is not unbelievable.

Now that I've had sometime to collect my thoughts I have more comments after my initial cry/laugh freak out. I keep trying to predict where this story is going but I never can. Each chapter is something that I've never considered, so my musings are not of much value but I'll leave them here if you want to know or be entertained or something.

Alys keeps saying that she's going to get into huge trouble and she's right in thinking that, but I don't see how she thinks (or if she thinks) Hayden's going to get out of it. He's been doing the entire thing with her. There's no way he could play off turning a blind eye to it. I'm interested in how this will develop, or if he plans on accepting fault for it also.

My second coherent thought was to wonder if they were ever going to kiss like a normal couple. I mean, the first time was to "train" her and this one was either an act (?) or angry. DONT GET ME WRONG. I love it. I love how they haven't because it's unlike every other romance fic out there and it plays wonderfully into the plot. Now you've got me wondering what the next one will be like, or if they're will be another one at all.

Then I started telling myself she should've asked him why or to explain and extrapolate. I hope she'll be sane/calm enough to eventually do that. After, I started thinking about Doctor Augustine. Is her cold front just a front? What's going on with her?

I LOVE IT. EACH AND EVERY CHARACTER. Even the despicable ones that I've got no sympathy for. I love them for adding so much to the story.

Adgdkakdk I HAVE TO GET THROUGH THE ENTIRE SCHOOL WEEK TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS LOL
THIS WILL BE MY MOTIVATION.

Dammit you're so good at writing. I'm crying for both of them and laughing at the same time because they're entire fight/confrontation makes me not know how to feel so I'm settling for both.

I did not see anything that you've thrown into the story coming at all.

Catching up time! Urm...is FP jerking you about? I wouldn't normally mention it, but all dialogue in this chapter is being punctuated with full-stops, when it should've been commas. That's not strictly true. Some lines have escaped the period treatment - but the problem is too prevalent for me to think it's human error. Also there seems to be a discrepancy with semi-colons and commas being used - as in far too much. Semi-colons are a tricky literary tool - and to be used between two main clauses - sometimes I noticed you were sneakily attaching subordinate clauses to the main clause via a semi-colon, when it should've been a comma instead!

Luckily the overall affect of your prose is not lost - and if you're reading this quite fast, most people would ignore the punctuation. I still liked this chapter a lot - you create such vivid images with your words! When Mrs Lexington said, "What have you done..." My heart was thumping, figuring Alys was busted. But I guess Alys is too good! Awesome chappie x

Absolutely incredible as usual. An emotional rollercoaster of trauma and drama...when Alys said "nothing", I cried.
Can't wait til next Friday to find out what the dear Doctor meant by a lie...duh duh duhhh

Ahh! Hayden is giving me whiplash, it was still nice to see how he stood up for her though. Thank you for updating!

I don't think I've mentioned this before, but I'm enjoying all the descriptions of painting the mural. It really is fascinating to a person like me who has no artistic talent. You give just enough details to make it interesting without overwhelming me with information. I'm so curious now about everything that's hidden beneath the surface of the overlayed mural. I'm as anxious as Alys about it being discovered by Dr. Augustine. I'm so sick of her meddling, but she did cause Hayden to kiss Alys, and I was really excited about that.

I felt so bad for Hayden when he told Alys that she's like everyone else. I'm dying to know the whole story about his past and what happened with the foster kid. If only he would talk to Alys instead of shutting her out in his wounded way. He really is like a lone wolf. The fact that Dr. Augustine saw enough emotion there to believe that he's dating Alys says a lot.

Oh man, I'm so worried about how everything will turn out! I've become so invested in these characters, and I don't want anyone to hurt them. I'm dreading the release of Alys's father, and I'm even worried about what he'll do to her mother. Alys has had so much to deal with already. I'll be anxiously awaiting the next chapter of this extraordinary story.

God I hate this Augestine chick, I can't decide yet if she's just a woman with a hard shell that's actually trying to help or she's just manipulative or what exactly. Lemme do thank you for that kiss you put in there :D

Very Interesting, Love it

Dear writer, don't worry. I think people are being quite sensitive. Alys' revenge is quite minor.. And I like the fact that things are progressing at this pace. I had a feeling that your summary would have happened in chapter one with us barely getting to know karri. Instead you let us walk through their friendship and feel dread knowing karri will get busted for the posters. This is your story, make it progress how you want it to because the readers will never have a consensus on how things should flow

Your story is one of the rare ones where i actually adore the female protagonist.. So well done writer.

This story.. It's weirdly fascinating

I love this story so much, and you've made it even better! I see that you've added more to this chapter, such as Alys's thoughts about Hayden using her words to ingratiate himself with her. I know that you've also added more dialogue. I'm not sure about him lifting her chin though. I can't recall if he actually touched her in this chapter before or only spoke to her. It's been awhile since I reread these earlier chapters. Whatever you've done, you've improved this chapter and made it flow better. You put my laziness to shame with your rewrites. I'm always focused on finishing a story rather than making it as good as possible. You've shown me that quality wins out over quantity. One great story is better than a thousand mediocre ones.

But who am I kidding? I'm Salieri to your Mozart. Rather than resenting your talent though, I'm thrilled that you're sharing it with us.

I saw the update and thought to myself that this is a Christmas gift ! So happy to see that you're back. Please don't leave us hanging. Especially now. After you just dropped a major bomb. I had to gasp out loud when I read the last lines of this chapter. The next chapter is going to be intense. .

I can't count the number of times I've read this story over and over again. They're both so messed up it's beautiful.

Lol please don't leave it at the cliffhanger. I'll be wondering about them until your next update. But awesome chapter as always!