Reviews for Crashing Down
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
I really like this, mainly because I was in an effing massive earthquake a few weeks back. You captured that feeling very well. There seems to be a double meaning in this, with these lines:

"We cannot see

What lies ahead"

Because it was true to the fact (in my case) that we couldn't see shit during that night, and were running into things, but also that we had no idea whether there were going to be thousands of dead, whether we were going to get even bigger ones...

Have you ever been in an earthquake? Because you wrote this really well.
skyward squidly squee chapter 1 . 1/14/2010
Hey, the refrain seemed to me pretty effective.

"We cannot see what lies ahead when all comes crashing down." I find that completely true, and well said, sdifgfdg.

"The light gives way

To endless night" Ahh, that was an interesting internal rhyme that kind of threw me off at first, because I didn't actually see it but heard it when I read it. o-o. Wow.

- giant squid.