There's always one ex boyfriend that you wish to forget about completely due to personal reasons. I can kinda relate to this as all of my ex boyfriends are "dead" to me, especially my first love. Well expressed :)

You just made me remember why i liked writing poetry. thank you! it was fantastic.

Brilliant piece. I like how you build it up with little things that seem in/significant. The last few paragraphs are just so well written! 'immortalized as the reason why I loved, and the reason why I died.' 'under no circumstances will I hear your name... become the silence I never had.' Wonderful lines! Please write more! :D

Normally, I would not like something like this.

This is not a jab at your writing at all, I just don't like reading about other people's love-angst because I have enough of my own. But you chose so many beautiful words and make this so unflinchingly...there. Right in your head, right in your face. The repetition and the description of your day really adds to the ending.

I also love that last italicized line.

the thing that pulled me in to read this was the summary, i thought it was brilliant, but, wow.. the whole piece was just stunning, excellent, by the end of it my mouth was wide open in shock by the tallent you have shown.

it's incredible.

i am speechless..

**bows and worships you**

hearts

I enjoy the way you wrote this. It's sounds so agonizing. The hopelessness of your story reminds me of my old poetry, and the artificial style is seductive. Although there were a few sentences that frustrated me a bit, I chalk it up to having a low tolerance for melodrama. Not that your story was ridiculously exaggerated, but I believe one or two of the lines are unnecessary and don't flow as smoothly in my head. No biggy. It's merely my obsessive compulsiveness... picking at your words.

XOXO

GOD SPEED

powerful.

there's always her, in the back of my head. because loving her is the only thing about me that's normal and whole and pretty, right now. it's right.

This is awesome. PURE awesomeness.