Reviews for Arranged Marriages Are Illegal, Right? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() its an awesome story. if nobody reads it then theyre missing out. but i would love to finish reading it and see what happens to raven and alex also the guys and kali the tiger. Helena. |
![]() ![]() ![]() im not bothered if you dont even read this but i had to put this anyway, i think this is one of the best stories ive read and im not going to read the 'new version' cause i like it the way it is. you should really keep on writing i think your brilliant. |
![]() ![]() I think it's a good idea. It definitely needs revision. But I also think that you should keep this version up. But maybe put in the description that you're revising it, you know? It'd suck if you just removed the whole thing. |
![]() ![]() And they don't get any less confusing -.- |
![]() ![]() Honey, witches are real. How do I know? It's 'cause I am one. |
![]() ![]() You forget to capitalize your "I"s a lot. If it was a continuous thing, I'd stop reading, buy it seems to be accidental. So just try and re-read more, okay? |
![]() ![]() -.-' You made her a hipster, didn't you? Oh well. My friends told me I'm turning into one after I dyed my hair purple, and evidently I've been dressing like one lately, too. Of course, I still love my red dress with the tiny white polka dots! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Y is she so damn pathetic? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I feel like I've read this story before... The names Alex and Raven seem familiar. Oh well I would like you to know this is the first supernatural story I have read on here in years. I don't normally read them, but I was in the mood for an arranged marriage, and yours was the first I found that didn't look terrible. I adore guys with snake bites :) |
![]() ![]() Honestly I love your story the only advice I could give about changing it would be the whole time change thing, that was the only weird moment to me. I can't wait for your next update! (Just some advice but I think if anything you should just go with how your story is currently instead of re-writing it :) I think its great!) |
![]() ![]() Okay, so... You have a great plot and all, but that's it. This story makes the definition of fiction look like a history book, none of your actions in this story are really all that beleivable. But you have great inspiration and integrity for the chapters since you've uploaded so many, keep in mind there always very short. To put it in simpler words, all of your charectors are cliche and your story is predictable. Not trying to hate or put you down, just trying to give you some actual advice. An example being the first chapter, no one's mother randomly sets up there 14 year old daughter with an arranged marriage with someone who happens to be a hot emo guy with a good persona and the main character puts up a sorry excuse for a fight. You're on the right train, just not on the right track. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am loving it so far! Please continue. |
![]() ![]() x3 Fricking awesome 3 I can't wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ugh... I'm getting sick of this whole "sci-fi" thing. I can't stand reading things about the future. Yet, I'm still addicted to this book. Back to their normal time frame pretty please? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey. This chapter reminds me of the song: "Let the Games Begin" by Anarbor Check it out and tell me what you think of it! P.S. I LOVE My Chemical Romance |