Yay, a new chapter!

I really like to see Ny and Gale get more closer - even if it (in the beginning?) is just friendship and curiosity. I also find it fascinating to see the differences between Gale's and Ny's (~our) world/race/customs/language etc.

I do hope though that they can venture out of the temple too and Ny (and I) get to know the rae'lire better - I guess I'm saying I would like to explore that world and discover it's treasures :)

I can't really add anything that I hadn't told you already, and the cuteness of the last part still gets me. So cute.

Another thing: if you think that flying pink elephant could distract me, think again. Yellow one might had a chance, but not a pink one. xD

I can't find the shocking part. Is it that there's no gender? I like the chapter though and I'm glad this is a happier one with Ny and Gale hanging out and getting to know each other. great job!

*sniffle* poor Ny. He must suffer more just because he's human and on top of that Gale is angry at him. I hope things get better. I don't think the water lords would be very happy with such bad treatment, but then maybe they do. I don't really know much about the water lords, but I'm very disappointed in what seems to be corrupt leadership everywhere I read. great job! :)

~Oh, he might lower his head as propriety demanded, but Ny somehow felt very few actually received his true respect.

... Those midnight-blue eyes, lighter than most raelire’, drank in the surroundings like the rivers drank the sea—hungry and never sated.

...stride through the group, effectively breaking it up. For a moment, Ny simply stood and watched the prince move, strides powerful as a hunting tiger.~ Great. Just watch out not to over do it.

And since Ny was the one that came to Gale, not the other way around and acted quite, for Ny, relaxed, is hard for me to see: ~as in their first encounter, this individual made Ny’s heart simultaneously want drop to his feet in a cold apprehension and beat clear out of his chest in admiration.~

~really behave with such openness to one such as Ny?~ Another great touch.

It's interesting how 'Show no weakness' still gets me.

And I have to say that Gale comes across as much more mature than he did at first. (Everything is in consistency.)

~shook his head when his brain began to function again at a higher level and his desires.~ That and bothers me.

Harsh, cruel and unjust punishment! But I do hope that the new friends he has found will help him even if they're unable to prevent everything. I would hate to see Ny grow cold and harsh as the Master is towards him and as his father had been earlier.

I know from my own experience that being soft and tenderhearted really does make your heart bleed too oft. And yes, you have to toughen up and swallow some insults and there are situations you can't help about. But there's also a line which separates tough from coldhearted. And there's no excuse in real life to cross it - there are more demanding and difficult ways, but there ARE ways out without becoming a harsh and cold person oneself.

Worst part for myself has always been being a spectator or bystander to other people's troubles. There are certain things with which you can help others and certain lessons people have to learn themselves. To stay there and not interfere is a tough thing to do. But sometimes necessary. Again until a line.

I sympathise in this part both with Ny and with Gale. And I've been in both roles in different situations so I can't really tell which is worse - to be the one receiving a cruel punishment or the one to watch without being able to stop it. Both make my heart bleed. I think that although I cringe at such scenes in movies and books, I do understand what it adds to the story. And I think that you're making this story more realistic, not just a fluffy fantasy like many other stories in FP tend to be. I'd say that if the main characters will get out of such tough situations showing their endurance, passion and strenght of will aswell as compassion, not with just a quick turn of fate (the author getting stuck :P and making a quick but unbelievable or cliche twist) then the story will definitely win from such deep and harsh notes.

stupid high council and they're nonsense. I hope that Gale isn't going to get himself into trouble though. I feel really bad for Ny. He's being neglected even here though I think that may soon change. I'm glad the two finally met. :) great job!

Interesting! I can really see a new world, a foreign race (species?) and culture being born before my eyes. You have a good writing style and I get almost immediately a movie rolling in my mind - I mean the experience of reading is like watching a movie - the characters come to life and feel like believable, interesting and captivating beings. The setting, the politics and of course all the other details give spice to it. It's a bit too early to tell anything about the plot yet, but I think it will be quite interesting and not cliche. I can't wait for the next chapters...

It's a good second chapter. I wonder how this is all going to work out. I like Gale's group of friends. they're good peoples so far. great job!

very interesting idea! :)

I noticed the changes: I think that from 'the constant baiting Binne offered', to 'They both knew that the young prince cared less than two blinks about what trouble he could dig himself into with his rash and unguarded behavior' and I don’t care if you are Councilmember Tagren’s son' and all the rest are nice touches. They explains why Gale is so allergic to Binne and why Binne can get him so easily upset, and also show Gale's character better.

I always amazed how the feel of the story or of the character can change with just small corrections.

Great chapter.

Interesting!

Like the summary. It's much better than the ones of your other stories.

The first scene of the story presented and told a lot about the world(s) in which the story is happening. It already sounds rich and layered - even though you haven't write anything about it.

Oh, Ny struggle with his sadness broke my heart, especially when he said himself that he would make father proud, not really knowing that you can't please the tyrant as like father sounds to be. But on the other side Ny also seems like a very grown up boy, especially when he looked forward to make his own judgment of things.

~colorful sheaths over the natural daggers on their forepaws~ U, I like this sentence.

And Jale sounds so delightful naughty, can't wait to read more about him.

U, interesting, intersting... My quriosity is piqued :)