This is really well done. I like the story a lot so far but you really need to go over these chapters you have up and edit them.

Fallow is land plowed and left unseeded for a season or not in use. You use this a lot when I think you mean to put 'Follow'.

This is such a great idea and I love the style in which you write but all of the spelling errors and incorrect homophones just stab me in the heart.

Kano drinks something then he collapses and Kole answers "I don't know"? He is such an idiot...I really wish he'd get killed or something.

No wonder Kole was a loser in his own world - he's really an idiot.

Why is Kole an idiot?

hello, um.. May i ask u smethng.. Can i draw this story into a manga? Its very interesting, and im serious.

back to reread. i notice several mistakes that’r too repetitive to be considered as typos. one of them is sore/sour/soar. i believe you mistook one to the other u know. u use sour instead of sore more than once. i think while the pronunciation sounds quite similar, their written forms’r way different :)

Just found this story and it seems pretty interesting so far, and well written, too, but for the spelling errors. "Its" is possessive; "it's" means "it is." Follow is following someone; fallow I've only ever seen used as a description for an untended or barren field... And a "pail" is something you carry water in, while "pale" refers to pastel or lighter colors. I have no idea if you're still active on here, but just so you know for the future. c:

Now to continue reading...

Such a nice and sweet story. Thank you very much for it!

I don't know how but from the first time TeriCano talked to Kole I was sure he was the sorcerer and was more convinced with the next chapters. Great story

That was incredibly beautiful...(big sigh & even bigger smile)!

You have a beautiful way with words, I am in awe...

That was a real exciting start, hooked me for sure.

hey, ive read this story like a bazillion times, and it just gets better and better as i read it. why hasnt it got a bazillion reviews you ask? bcos you'd get sick of my comments, that's why. high praise, my friend, high praise. just imagine ficpress geting jammed up with my reviews if i did, k? that's how many.

anyhoo, i was wondering somethig - where do you get your names? i mean, kikuchi and then marek and kole - they sound like they come from completely different countries, or are they made up?

excellent writing. i read your stories like pandas eat bamboo.

thats probably not a great analogy. i read other stories too, but i like yours best? yeah. that's the one. i meant that. XD

I loved it. Im so glad I read this it was a really interesting story:)

Aw, this story was just too cute! I loved all the drama in it, and the world you described sounds so AMAZING! And so peaceful, and happy, and just downright AWESOME! I'm glad there was a happy ending for both Kano and Tal, too. I liked the little extra at the end of the story :D