I absolutely LOVED this story! It was one of the best I have ever read. It had just the right pace, no misspellings, and was overall a fantastic story. Please keep writing!

perrfectt ending (:

Amazing story. :) I love it. No errors, really. Maybe one grammar one at most, but that's it. You're very good at writing :)

awe (: that was cutee

You'd better not be finished with this story! :) I love it. Very few spelling and grammar mistakes, and good descriptions. You kept me on the edge of my seat, eagerly waiting to ready more. :)

The only spelling error I caught: "Them minute he got off the plane" Them should be the. :)

Keep up the good work!

Oh, and please update on Loving Charlie Evans? :) [I think I got the title write.] :D Ha.

Absolutely amazing story,and thrilling ending to it! xD I really hope you make an Epilogue or something, also! If you write another story as good as this one, I'll be sure to read & review! :)

that was ahmazingg! please write more!

Love it, and looking forward to reading more :) I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, either. :D

Absolutely amazing story! I love the suspense, character development, and all of the description! The plot line itself is especially great, though! Awesome story, and I will definitely follow it until the end from here (I just found it yesterday. :)Update soon please!

i just read your story for the last few hours. it is really good. i think you should write a little more to the story about what happens afterwards.

I liked this chapter a lot, but it almost seemed rushed into in the end. Looking forward to reading more. ]

Lovin' the story. There are a few grammar errors and stuff like that, so I suggest when you're finished writing, reread your work :) It helps me a lot to do that.

Looking forward to the next chapter! :D

I'm trully in love with this story, it's amazing. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more soon!

Hello there. :)

A little constructive criticism: less physical description. As readers, we don't need to know every single article of clothing (ex. Her black and white checkered Jansport backpack was slung over her shoulder and her light yellow knit sweater was tied around her waist, over her khaki skort.; Jessie had pin straight layered dark brown hair. Part of it was pulled back with a small bejeweled butterfly pin. Her eyes were a deep golden color and her face was tanned perfectly.; Taylor stripped the khaki skort, navy blue knee highs, elbow length white button up shirt, and yellow sweater off of her, replacing them with a lavender silk tank top and silk lime green shorts. She slipped on her pair of white fluffy Terry flip flop slippers.) Read it out loud to yourself and feel out where you can cut parts out. Physical description is good, but not to the point where we know what the color of every single piece of clothing is.

Other than that, good start! :)

This chapter surprised me, which is a good thing. It was very interesting (: