|Reviews for Among the Stars|
| Ajescent chapter 1 . 2/4/2010
Only real problem I have with this are the lines
Searching for Knowledge
Looking for Knowledge
Searching and looking are the same thing and the fact that you use "knowledge" twice makes the second line obsolete. Maybe find another word for "Knowledge" to fit on the second line.
You try something similar later on in
Our Lost Brothers
Our Missing sisters
I think this works better than the first example as it's similar but different unlike the first example which just comes across as repetition.
Otherwise, not bad.