|Reviews for Aura|
| A girl named Cecille chapter 1 . 5/31/2010
I thought the poem had a lot of feeling in it. Some rhymes seem slightly forced, but they actually seem to work that way because of the general mood. It seemed like you were very inspired to write it.
You also might consider "are sensations of being warm" to "the sensations of being warm" (so that it reads "And coming soon after the swarm, the sensations of being warm") because it sounds less awkward
Often times taking out unnecessary words at the beginning of lines (such as And, The, or Are) gives a poem a stronger tone.
| Amanda M. Lynn chapter 1 . 1/29/2010
Thank you much for the reviews. Epilepsy does suck, but it's not a death sentence, so it's not the worst it could be. :-) I'm not a big fan of Salvador Dali, but "The Persistence of Memory" seemed to be the best descriptive thing I could use.
| Bretagna Fire chapter 1 . 1/29/2010
This was beautiful. I love the sort of surreal point of view and the little homage paid to Salvador Dali.
Going on my favorites for sure!
Bretagna Fire. :)
| RandomUser674 chapter 1 . 1/29/2010
Very good imagery. Sorry about your epilepsy(?), it must be horrible. Great poem.