Well, this story is about time jumping about, and somehow, the scenes are also kinda jumpy

This is amazing! You definitely have talent!

You have to proofread your work. The errors does not even end with spelling and grammatical, sometimes you use a diffrrent word for what you are really pertaining like toward for towered. It is causong me headache reading. Atleast for starter the story isn't too bad.

Yes, the happy ending is much better! I May took everything rather well, didn't she?

Good story,

xJadeRainx

I think I prefer fairy tales.

xJadeRainx

I can't wait for the alternate ending!

Oh, dear. Emma means well, but she's wrong! William never slept with May! Gee, Alex needs to find a way out, and soon. maybe William can rescue her...

xJadeRainx

Stupid Emma! :(

I hope William and Alex would still be able to run away :(

damn you maid! you can't trust anyone when you're from the present day going back in time to the 1800's. they never understand. stupid stupid maid. poor alex and william.

oh mah gad. stupid maid person , caroline woman. haha, anyways, i like where this is going. please update soon!

I wonder what her plan is?

His reaction to the car was PRICELESS! Ahh I can picture all of this in my head as if it is a movie. It's all so perfect. And the whole marriage thing was good. I guess I would like more on how Will felt about being here. He was really quick to feel like he had fully escaped his life after what two hours. But anyway good so far. Love it!

How awful. Poor William being forced into a marriage. Great story so far. :) Can't wait to find out what happens even though I kind of a have a clue. But its definitely more than what I thought it would be. It's like fate on both ends. No wrapping your way around it.

Good story so far. But there are some minor grammar mistakes. Like at one point you switch narration point of view and you use words like I as if Alex is telling the story. Might want to fix those but so far so good.

So the best part of this story is when Alex said I should slap you. LMFAO. I nearly fell out of my desk chair. It was so on point and so present day. I love how much power we women have today. Go Alex. And this is such a sweet story. I'm addicted and hooked. :)

OMG! Alex is going to put on the wedding dress and pretend to be May! Won't William be pleasantly surprised. While that may be an exciting prospect... I can see this ending badly.

Keep writing,

xJadeRainx