|Reviews for Hello?|
| Narq chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
This is an interesting bit, I felt that you could have had more verbs there, though, to bang in the emotions.
Still, I think it was good.
Another thing is that you know you can do shift-enter for single line spacing and enter for double line spacing?
| skyward squidly squee chapter 1 . 2/2/2010
Well, I related to this well, so I liked it better for that. I really like the first stanza, my favorite line being: "As if we still are what we were." for what it is/says, and also for the almost/"approximate" rhyme, which is something I always get in to.
I believe there is a typo in the second-to-last line in the second stanza. The word 'hand' might be 'hang'?
I feel like the word 'soliloquy' really didn't fit well with the rest of your word choice, as most of it seemed more simple.
I also really liked "Because this pain is still a rush/More than the emptiness of Numb."
- giant squid.