|Reviews for The Lover's Society|
| Arv chapter 2 . 2/14/2010
Not my usual type of story, but still it is interesting, writing is good, plot is intriguing, and you have an interesting style. Strange word arrangements (is this translated from another language into English?) make it a bit disjointed at times, but still a good read.
Keep going with this. I'll be back soon to see where you took it.
| Darwin chapter 2 . 2/14/2010
See I told you I got it fixed! LMAO!
"he dawned a black silk shirt." In this context I think you want Donned (to put on)
"the stench of liquor and a woman on his breath. " Ew!
"She was just a roués to get closer to you" I think you mean "ruse" (a ploy)
Oh how interesting. I can just see the shovel in his hand digging the hole deeper! Poor guy is truly smitten...