Reviews for the simplicity of good and evil
tiger002 chapter 1 . 2/10/2010
That was good, I liked how you expanded on the story in the Bible. I have to wonder, how many times had Eve been tempted before she finally succumbed to the fruit
Happy to be Mad chapter 1 . 2/8/2010
Nicely written . . . I am not a follower of the bible but I think you told the story well. I think your poem goes beyond good vs. evil. I think you should change the last two lines; the end does not fit the flow of the poem. . . Its seems if you have forced in your idea.

I do not like how intelligence is portrayed as a crime or how humans are being punished for beings human. I guess that’s the fault for believing in a religion . . . You will be persecuted for being human . . . . .

Otherwise I liked it . . . just as a poem, ignoring the religious influence