Very intriguing so far.

I like how you use the metaphor of a song that won't leave your head to describe Abby. It fits well.

I hope that you don't mind, but I spotted three typos:

"he saw a very family figure" should be "familiar"

"It was like a talent he could on bestow upon her" perhaps the word "on" after "could" doesn't belong? Not sure on that one.

Finally, "earphones back in and started to job" should be "jog"

Very interesting story. I was intrigued throughout the entire book. Will you be writing a sequel for this?

I really enjoyed reading this

Cheers,
TQL

Hey,
I'm really loving this story! It reads really well.
I also just realised that Abby and Jethro are both characters from NCIS! And I'm guessing that this is a coincidence. I live watching NCIS, do you?

Cheers,
TQL

Their choice of staying together is not easy...people will talk behind their backs...the age difference, the way he ended things with Victoria (I think he made a big mistake there...he shouldn't humiliate Victoria like that!).

I hope their love is strong enough to go through all that together. They're lucky their families are happy that they are together...

It was an interesting journey. Thank you!

LOVE this one! I guess because I am actually 27 I dont find the age difference to be a bad thing. But I might feel different if I were 15 and thinking about a 46 year old man. I just happen to think there are many wonderful advantages to older men.

The main characters in this story were much more unique than the others. Of course she liked the Soup but I think you did a great job of adding new elements to this character.

I really liked it. Great Job!

Hi LFF I have a question is Jethro 41 of 46? becouse in the prologe you said he was 41 and now he is 46? Im kinda confused? I dont really care about age. but it is a bit to much.. he is almost fifty and she is twenty, she is my age! The forty one is better compared to the forty six. But hey it is your party so you discise. so what is his real age?

lots of love,

I didn't really like the ending. I felt like the epilogut could have been a regular chapter. I don't know what happened with victoria, what they did that day, or how the rest of their life was. I feel like that's what an epilogue is supposed to do. Tie up loose ends, and tell readers how the rest of the character's life went. A sequel would be helpful.

It would be funny, though improbable if Victoria walked in on them.

LOVE THIS!

*sigh*

Hmmm.

I love Larissa! 3

Wow, Abby! I didn't know you had that effect on guys.

This is a very skillful way to end the love. I'm getting more and more impressed by your gift every day. :)

This was clearly a thinking chapter. :)

In chapter 5. Four, did you purposefully do the symbolical approach to Jethro smoking?