|Reviews for Provenance I: Verlangen|
| rawr.RAWR.rawr chapter 24 . 4/26/2020
This is honestly one of the most unhealthy relationships I ever read in a story and let me tell you I've read some shit; like a guy giving the love of his life something that made her lose their memories but even he felt remorse and was tortured and distressed about it. What she went through their senior year isn't something that should ever be justified away, she needed therapy to properly get over it and no one other than Phobe showed any real regard to how she felt. Also if anyone wants to give up their life and change for their significant other it is their decision not anyone else's and should never be forced, he didn't feel true remorse over it or any of his actions.
That aside he just went around slaughtering families? People who could be in a position like Georgia or innocent children and she just jokes it off? He didn't feel remorse for putting his mate through mental anguish or stripping her of her humanity so why would he feel remorse over killing kids?
Honestly I tried to read this the whole way through but her telling Georgia to stay in an abusive relationship because she now understands the pain of being away from a mate is sick and I'm done.
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/7/2019
No. This isn't a romance, it's a tragedy. Why hasn't she left when Pete bailed the first time? Why didn't she leave when Pete bailed the second time? Why did she sit back down?
| Guest chapter 28 . 8/22/2019
it is nice...I wish you continue to writer their children stories too with less aggressive male lead characters..(Though Mari was his mate, nothing will justify Ashland's first behavior towards her which made her to run away in first place.. )
| Guest chapter 27 . 8/22/2019
I wish her husband is the first one to know about her pregnancy..And what about his wolf senses to sense the child in her womb?
| Guest chapter 26 . 8/22/2019
Ashland having other girls when Mari ran away was not a nice thing..& Mari's ways of treating little Evangeline (though she seems to be psycho..) also not impressive..
| Guest chapter 24 . 8/22/2019
It is nice to see some German character as lead ones..it is different..
| Shailaputri chapter 22 . 8/22/2019
I don't like Pete commenting her on not being able to love her mate..He was helping her so far and after getting to know about the attack on his mate he lost his mind..
| Guest chapter 18 . 10/7/2018
A story of a human girl who didn't understand the feelings of a supernatural being nor he her's. Is what I thought I would be getting but this is...
I read this a long time ago and I decided to re-read and I can't even finish it. Some of the stuff the characters do and how they react just isn't normal behaviour. Even with the aspect that they are werewolves it is unaceptable. I normally don't give reviews but I think this story had potential. But some directions you took are baffling. And keep in mind I'm not doing this for you to change the story but for you to consider details next time.
For starters the Marlien's first interaction with Ashland needs not to be assault. Really makes him unlikable from the start.
Your characters need character. Those two need to talk. Not just yell, molest and have sex with one another but talk. I for the life of me don't know anything about these characters and they don't know each other. What do they like? What do they hate? Any hobbies? Trouble at school or work? How does being in a relationship affect them and those around them? The it's because your my mate is just an annoying version of the love at first sight cliche.
They to be consistent than just flipping from extremes just to move the plot forward. Marlien goes from scared to having sex with Ashland for almost no reason. Then after that she goes from scared to yelling at him? Where did that confidence come from? She couldn't even look him in the eye before. Ashland is an character I can't even root for. He's a sociopath that doesn't even consider her feelings. I don't know why he is alpha when he's so impulsive and hurts the person he cares for the most.
And her friends are an awful bunch. Pete and Georgia especially. You don't tell your friend to hang around with the guy she thinks wants to rape her. And I can barely gleam any character trait from them that isn't just to move the plot along.
| DeathlyIceMaiden chapter 28 . 2/9/2018
| Guest chapter 28 . 12/21/2017
| RiekeMe chapter 23 . 9/30/2017
I liked your story very much. Most of the characters were fun and interesting... accept for marilein. She was super annoying, I don't know how to say it in a nicer way. Her reactions were mostly over the top and the things she said (and thought) were often really mean and nasty. I cringed alot and really fought with myself to finish the story because in general it was very interesting.
Especially as a german it was interesting to see how we are described in this story. You were really nice to us but I was sad to see lot of stereotypes and of course the 2nd ww MUST be mentioned when someone talks/writes about germans... (eventhough it was your characters who mentioned it and mb they're not the best in history?)
Well, to come to the end of this review. The plot is interesting and the characters offer a lot. The setting and all in all situation was good too... if only the heroine of the story was a different one
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/4/2016
Why does she listens to others about giving him another chance? He obviously scares her, so she should leave him. She's a pushover.
| Luontoiti chapter 15 . 5/27/2016
I hate Marilein so much! Argh!
| OdderThings chapter 26 . 3/23/2016
I love the story, but really didn't like a 24 year old making fun of a 12 year old for not having hit puberty... Seems beneath her
| OdderThings chapter 9 . 3/22/2016
The tell me you want me part was great- especially because I feel like Ashland would be insecure about her really wanting him since she was forced before