Reviews for Senji Works
NsShadowSerpent chapter 2 . 2/25/2010
Neat! I liked the way you described Senji's Aura based abilites. Then again, I'm always a sucker for a good explanation of anyone's abilities mid battle, it adds to the action. Seems like he's a fighter that prefers strategy over strength. Nice twist on the job they pulled for Makoto. Wonder if Harima will ever develop new abilities on his own in time...?

NsShadowSerpent
Niki Tori chapter 1 . 2/25/2010
That was a cool first installment. I really like your idea. It was funny how the two main character's interact with one another. So cute X 3 lol. Really enjoyed the read.

Much Love and Many Hugs

Niki T.
NsShadowSerpent chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
Haha! This story is just as quirky as the summary. Yeah, it was the summary that drew me to click on this story, and I'm glad I did. The first part that really ripped my sides was,

"So, whatt's your problem?" A blonde girl wearing gothic lolita clothing said. She leaned closer to him and poked his cheek with her lollipop. The student was speechless as he looked at the small girl. "Come on, tell me your problem!"

I seriously broke into hysterics, and I don't even know why. I could easily picture a character doing something outrageous like that.

On a side note, your story is very interesting, but I think it needs more description, like the look of the building from the outside, or from the inside itself. Also, you could have further described exactly what Atsuko's outfit looked like, it could have painted a better picture. (I assumed it was something black, with a tight skirt and fishnet stockings if that helps.) Overall, I really did like it aside from the criticism, and I look forward to reading more of your story! It cracks me up!
Lady Kiri chapter 3 . 2/21/2010
And here I thought Kira was normal...well, didn't really expect him to be. I really like how this is turning out!

Lady Kiri
Lady Kiri chapter 2 . 2/21/2010
Okay Kira already seems pretty interesting, I'm looking forward to learning more about him.

There wasn't much in the way of grammatical errors, though I saw a few issues with tense. (Nothing that major)

Until next time,

Lady Kiri

p.s. does your reciprocal review policy apply to all of your stories or just the one you mentioned?
Lady Kiri chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
Senji and Astuko have very interesting customer service skills. Your summary drew me into reading this. Looking forward to reading more.

Until next time,

Lady Kiri
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