Reviews for ridges and things
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
Some of the lines in this are very nice, like "wondering if maybe/the heart is not such a necessary/thing" and "and I can't help but imagine every/little ridge on your finger tips." I do wonder about using the word "thing" twice in the first stanza, though. It's a very vague word, so there are probably stronger words you could have chosen. I do like the use of it in relation to the heart, though. I think with a little tweaking this could be very nice. Keep writing! :)