Reviews for WishPretendBelieve
My Parakeet Has Issues chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
Oh, I actually like this quite well. :) Your use of repition throughout was the perfect touch. My favorite stanza is. . . the second one, about dropping. It stood out to me for some reason.

I think you should add more punctuation though, especially in the 3rd stanza. There's more lines than any other stanza and in addition to all the listing this makes it kind of hard to follow. You also didn't capitilize much, even the "I's". I don't really know if this was a style you were going for, or you just didn't edit it out. Just thought that I'd mention it though. :)

Other than that, very nice poem. I liked it a lot.

Keep up the Goodwork,

My Parakeet Has Issues