Reviews for Lost in His Eyes
Orion Demasecus chapter 1 . 6/10/2010
An interesting piece of writing. I like how there was a bit of suspense, not knowing whether or not "he" was going to leave "her" in order to approach the protagonist. It kept pulling me in to read more until the end, and that is what good writing should do.

My only negative criticism is about the first line. Having "And then" at the very beginning doesn't feel quite right as an opener for this particular piece of writing. It gives the feeling that you had more you wanted to write but cut it short. Not a big deal but just a little something I noticed.