Reviews for The Great Solar Schism: Section 0 Shadow Squad
xxx1000 chapter 2 . 9/4/2013
You have a nice introduction to the characters and good description of them, however there is one negative I find very distracting. What writing pov is this? It started off with what looked like omniscient and then shifted to a form of third person, then back and forth again.
xxx1000 chapter 1 . 8/12/2013
The way it is written and worded, reminds me of the beginning scene from the Fellowship of the Rings film, where Galadria is explaining about the rings and how dangerously powerful Sauron's ring is. A very good introduction, it has mystery, excitment and holds promise.

I personally might have broken it into sections rather than just one large paragraph, but that's purely a preference, not a negative critique.
jm1681 chapter 7 . 2/14/2011
First off, the idea you used to begin WWI here; absolutely terrifying. I could see that happening in reality, and honestly, it made me feel more than a little cold inside.

Second, the parallels I've drawn to other series while reading this, it's almost like an amalgam of elements from other works I love. I can honestly say, I can't wait to read more, and to see what else you have in store :)

Third, if a fan might make a request, more Echo ;) I like her ;)
jm1681 chapter 3 . 2/14/2011
Well that is certainly a big creepy thing :D
jm1681 chapter 1 . 2/14/2011
Oph...

That was a VERY good way to open things up.

I don't fancy being given everything at the beginning of a story, but the feeling of absolute foreboding you created here is just magnificent.

On to chapter 2 :)
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 7 . 7/1/2010
Nicely written. Keep it up!
AllanHollow chapter 7 . 6/29/2010
Interesting, I must say. Though it was very Halo-esque throughout the beginning. But yeah, I'll put it my archive, no problem.
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 6 . 6/20/2010
When is chapter 7 gonna come out? Update soon! :D
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 5 . 5/28/2010
Finally some action! Good job detailing the battles, it makes it more interesting knowing what's happening everywhere.
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 4 . 5/28/2010
Okay, I did not expect Brutus to be a child-like subject. In my head, it was a hard-core killer that didn't think 2 times. I guess I got very surprised when I read that part, lol. Everything is perfect as usual, just some small errors
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 3 . 5/28/2010
Subject Brutus... I hope he turns good XD

Good chapter, I like the way you write, though I've noticed some little mistakes, but I'm not here to judge.

Keep up the good work!
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 2 . 5/27/2010
Somehow I get the felling of Halo 3? Well, I'm not here to criticize, Awesome chapter. Can't stop reading this somehow...
Ind3p3ndanceNLib3rty chapter 1 . 5/27/2010
I just read the prologue and... WoW. Just WoW. I can't wait to keep reading this.