BORING AND WIERD

long and annoying. don't like the rhetoricAL QUESTIONS. YAY

I really liked it until it was repeating too much and the endding was a bit un-nesseracy (did i spell that right?).

Made me laugh in the first three lines. The tabbing in his brain felt like a stabbing feeling in his brain. All good, though :P I few spelling errors but that's always alright. Needs to be question marks after questions, although it's completely your call if the poem should have question marks or not.

As for the poem overall, it was alright, I suppose. Very simple and casual sentences make for a slightly dull read.

Looking forward to future poems.