|Reviews for Weight of wait|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
I like the play on words here with weight and wait. It works well and it's interesting. I also liked the part of a mistake across your face and wanting to remove it. It's a great physical description for how people feel emotionally about mistakes. I also love the ending. Addressing the reader was a nice touch and the image was really powerful. Well done.
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| Mirabella chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
Wow, very strong indeed, and i loved it. :)
Great descriptive techniques.
| Isca chapter 1 . 3/5/2010
"I think about cataloging moments: the way a petal might be brought wayside by the wind." God, this is such a sacrosanct image. I love the tone of this line too. I like the idea that the speaker likes order and wants to "catalogue" the important moments in her life. Good work! :)
| recycle rhymes chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
i like this one: the weight of a mistake - that is perfect diction. and last lines are an interesting idea.
| Brenda Agaro chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
Again, it was short and to the point. Beautifully written and honest. "oxygen becomes an oxymoron" was clever.