Reviews for Boundaries
3M2R chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
It felt like a child caught in a divorce of her parents. Sweet innocence soon to dissolve under the pressure of reality.
Aida Rose chapter 1 . 4/28/2010
A theme: the Loss of Innocence? I felt that as soon as you mentioned the baby,and then her naivety. Luna's someone you knew?
walkmetoblivion chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
I can't say how many emotions tug at me just reading the first stanza.

You're brilliant, Danielle.
Isca chapter 1 . 3/25/2010
"Payne's grey eyes of an infant." The phrasing here is wonderful; the tone is emotional and intense. I like it.

"She bounds within the boundaries of sight." The best line from the poem, in my opinion. I love the wordplay between bounds & boundaries. It's brilliant. :)
Thenardier chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
This poem is crafted beautifully. The line "Silk hairs kiss with every caress" is just priceless, and I love who you neatly wrapped up the ending.
Karl Olen chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
Deep, good word painting.

I especially liked the first two lines. Well done.

I know how a bit of feedback, good or bad, is really nice.

-Karl Olen