Reviews for Wheat
Guest chapter 1 . 10/26/2015
The description is absolutely beautiful! You have just the right balance, it's neither lacking description or overflowing with it. You should be proud of yourself! The ending was unexpected, I am still left thinking if it was imagined because there was no trace of the house left -them sorts of endings are the best, where you're left still thinking about what's really happened. The punctuation seems to be spot on too, so well done! :-D I can't think of anything negative at all, normally I pick up on punctuation, but as mentioned above it appears to be correctly used.

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rejected.freak chapter 1 . 1/6/2013
i really love your story, but when my classmate read this on my phone via mobile site, she told me the story is too predictable. but to me, it's just perrrrfect. kudos to your story. \m/
eb chapter 1 . 10/24/2012
This is really good. I really like the description at the beginning of the house :D
Acidic Dreaming chapter 1 . 7/19/2011
Wow, this was lovely. Very creepy and strange, nice job. :)
Domestic bliss chapter 1 . 5/31/2011
Very well written. Creepy as shit!

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Violet Sarblew chapter 1 . 3/5/2011
Creepy in a deliciously dark way. The ending was especially...wow.
Wednesday's Cannibal chapter 1 . 9/1/2010
This is very well written. It has all the elements of being a good chiller story. You pulled it together seamlessly, and for that, I thank you. There were a few spots that I noticed that needed a little editing, such as insignificant little words that were confused with other insignificant little words. O few "they"s that should have been "the"s, things like that. But other than that, very, very good.

-Laz
Nice chapter 1 . 6/18/2010
Very descriptive, and the ending was a nice touch to the story.
kosmo chapter 1 . 3/10/2010
This is an incredible story that captures the small town lifestyle perfectly in an ominous harvest.
Cheeseraptor5 chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
I really can't stress enough how beautifully written I found this, so I'll leave it at that. Great style, imagery, etc. Also, I loved the ambiguity of the ending, bravo on that.
I Am The Masquerade chapter 1 . 3/7/2010
This was very wonderfully written. The imagery in it was very vivid and beautiful, and the ending was just right for this type of writing. This story was lovely in its subtle creepiness, and it leaves the reader wondering what really happened. Congrats on writing such a wonderful piece of horror.

-Masq
VirgilCarney chapter 1 . 3/5/2010
I liked this, i pictured it all in my head and it was pretty creepy. The plot would make a good movie.
saintsinnerlady chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
This was really wonderful. you painted such a beautiful picture of the wheat feilds i felt like i was standing there. and the tension and creepieness of it, it was really great. i found myself afraid for him, i thought for sure he was going to become a part of the wheat! great job!

~Saint

{[ With love, from The Match Book]}

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Althea Dreamer chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
Very creepy. I like your imagery of the wheat and soil. The descriptions really add to the mood. Good job.