|Reviews for Fabula Crepusculum|
| conleyswifey chapter 1 . 3/28/2011
very well written. I understood it very well and dusk has always been my favorite time of day. I find the night to be so peaceful. You did a great job with the descriptions and it formed an almost awe inspiring picture in my mind. Great job!
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 3/20/2011
I love the word choice. It creates such vivid images and establishes a tone of wonder and awe.
Also, a very interesting topic. I like how you take a common cliche and turn it upside down. I love when poems change the way I view things.
[Tell the world, o Knight,
To believe in the darkness
For it holds answers] I loved those lines.
My one suggestion would be to keep an eye on the flow. A lot of lines were very self-contained and there was a pause at the end of them too often, which made this a little chunky to read. That's a shame, because internally in the lines, the words flowed well together.
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| Orin Forever Crimson chapter 1 . 3/19/2011
This story-poem was very well written and you kept to form quite well. I also like to explore the concept that dusk is the beginning rather than the end. Of course, that might have to do with the fact that I would be largely nocturnal if not for the fact that the rest of the world functions during the day and forces me to as well.
Orin a.k.a JLL
| Dragonette101 chapter 1 . 3/10/2010
Nice! u go gurl
k? I luvd the poem BUT kida hard 2 understand im like what?
i like the way you have described the enviornment (if thats correct according to you)
But totally its really gud.
Keep it up! :)
P.S: try to reveiw mine as well (please)
| hez23 chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
wow i understand it its well wow your really good i loved it x
| steffxnie chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
Very nice haikus! They flow wonderfully and I think you did a great job phrasing the words. The similes and metaphors add more to the images and I love the expressions here. It's hard to fit in the words because of the syllables, but you've managed it well. A lovely piece. Keep writing!
| Skinny.Pig chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
Very lovely poem, I'll be sure to add it to my list. :)