I really like this! Update soon!

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Are you ever going to update this story? I lovelovelove it! The characters are engaging and defy stereotypes (kudos to you) and I love how prissy Charlotte ends up being - yet still lovable and responsible and awkward. Wonderful story set-up - can't wait to see how the plot goes.

Oh how I am enjoying your obvious gift as a wordsmith. Your sentence structure seems to flow in a way that I can only dream about. I am really looking forward to finding out how the story progresses, so please keep updating as often as you can.

Cheers,

Kayla.

I love this story! :) I've just picked it up and couldn't stop to the end! It has a very arresting beginning to be sure, and the characters are very nicely developed.

I wish to give a detailed critique, but my head's been begging for some sleep for an hour now, so all I can say is update, update, update! Can't wait to read more. :)

Ah! I love this! I really do. The sarcastic humor invested in your prologue was perfect, so perfect, and I do enjoy your use of the language. There were only a very few moments when I had to pause and think, "Hm, does that feel right?", which, I assure you, is intensely unusual for me. And generally I answered the question with a - "Well, I do believe it does."

As of now, I honestly have no critique - there are simply a few sentences here and there which could use some simple rephrasing, but I'm honestly not even concerned about them. My interest is completely piqued. I love your tone, I love the wit to this story, and I love this fascinating beginning.

I believe that this is the most enthusiasm I've ever shown for a fictionpress story.

Take that as the compliment it is.

You, my dear, have been favourited.

Please update soon.

This is a great start-the writing is very lively and the plot so far seems engaging and original. Keep going!

But since you asked about anachronisms...

It's not clear when this takes place. Your intro says Regency/early 19th cent, by which I assume 1811-1820 or so. Bloomers were not invented until 1850, and didn't really catch on until much later. Look up Victorian dress reform on Wikipedia. Also steam locomotives were starting to be used, but not in a big way for travel until the 1840s or so. Finally, people didn't really keep cats as pets until the late 19th century, influenced by Romantic poets, who were seen as very eccentric for their attachment to cats. Prior to that, cats were kept around for killing mice and rats, but people were generally not attached to them the way they were to lap dogs.

Sorry, you asked! If you change your setting to 1860s-1880s or so, you'll be fine.

Wow amazing work. This is truly some good writing. You have wonderful detail, the Regency period is on par and the plotline has me very intrigued.

Hope you update soon

:)

I'm very excited to see where this goes! It is very well written and the text/wording is very Regency friendly. Thanks for sharing!